DV8 vs Willy Wonka
 

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Check in by: 08-02-04 at 03:02 PM

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DV8 has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-02-04 02:32 PM.

Willy Wonka has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-02-04 02:36 PM.

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TOPICAL…FAMILY

INTRO:SENARIO


Ring””ring””I can’t accept your apology
Im sorry mommy your dead to me
Daddy why don’t we talk to grandma…..?
You really wanna kno??
Ya..
Ok sit down im gonna tell you a story when I was young I said:


Im leaving this situation, its much more feasible than staying,
I know im your creation, but your rules aren’t reasonable for obeying,
I think the alcoholic drink has ruined your motherly maternal instincts,
You only thank me when holding your hair from the pueck in the sink,
It’s a bitter taste, without mama’s love I feel unwanted and out of place,
These are just extra wounds for a man who’s never seen his fathers face,

So grandma was bad??? Well yes honey just a drunk n depressingly sad!

My mama freebased money so I could have a high school tuition,
From my stepfathers home he’s quick to always hand me an eviction,
Or a punch 2 the head and face, I continuesly to find a quiet place,
I swore he was’nt anything, but you said he meant more to you then I did,
As I cried, I hope you die kid was what I viewed through my busted eyelids,
I was at war with who was supposed to be my life bringer,the ultimate giver,
The all knower, my nourisher and most of all my aspiration encourager,

So understand ’little 1”my life was sad without a moma that did’nt nerture,
I met you 5 years ago, so im letting you know what it is to torture,
Your smile capitivated my soul that was tattered and miserable,
I knew I could change our lives for the future if I was honourable,
I was young but I knew that I wanted to raise you as my own,
Cause I never wanted your precious little heart to feel alone,
And although there is no biological tie between use that binds,
There ain’t no blood test that can tell me you ain’t mines,
And Its never been kept a secret who your real father is,
But that bastard don’t even know what your favourite colour is
When you have a bad dream, you scream my name not his,
Sometimes I wounder if you found me or if I found you,
Your lifes already been hard enough, I see the strength in you,
So you see our life and immediate family is priority,
Im here for support n I’ll never try ta come done like authority,
The older you get, the closer we get, its actually hard for me,
Cause I gotta realistically look upon tomorrow n be bothered,
I dread the first time your mad at me and say “your not my real father”


Dady ill never say that…..no honey..its just a proven fact…..


hope ya'll liked it....pc...DV8

Kinda sloppy cuz im short on time, but here.

November 16th, born another poor kid in the streets
Dont know wether this dream life was given with me
Or was I just a curse who tore hus-band and wife
No more love cuz my mothers work? It was dam tite
Its like, why would this life be given for this strife?
God, sets light on rich but shits on the pov-rish types
My mother cant afford to support lives under welfair
My brother stands on the cornor, lines another self fair
Twins, but within the world my skin crawls at his site
In the skin site we're similar sorts, who'll fall in life
But I have plans, seperate the brands of man and land
And I'm tired of these fake hands, I'll land on my OWN DAM FEET!
As my family has no time in these days of dieing dreams
Grasp my brothers wrist and try to find his face but he's a dieing breed

*Cops at the door speaks*
"Is there a kid here, 5-9 high dark eyes who lives near?
He's a caucasion kid, wear-in roc-a-wear
This young man is a suspect in the murder of a Mr. Watkasan
He's among a grand crack down on crime and he must be captured mam."

*I come to the door*
Me-"Whats Going on, what the fuck get your hands off."
The cop holding on to my arm as I struck and desend off
Cop-"You're coming with me, your wanted for one count murder, first degree
You're one of the key suspects in a shooting, you're rights are seazed."
He dragged me with back at the floor to the car
Preseaded to grab my head and push it rather hard
Sitting in the back, tattered seats and contemplating why
Spitting at the backs of cops hats looking like what I hate about ghetto lives
Got to prison and with in a few hours a had visit
Came to spot at the glass the vision of mirror image in it
And he, he who is a part of me passing back thoughts like telepathy
This is crazy, my brothers crime my punishment, never let grieve my family on acounta me.

short on time??you said 3 hours....but you got it up anyways..i thought it was ok...a bit off topic though..but goo'luck willy....

Thanks man, na cuz I got offline cuz I had to go take my baby sister to the park and didnt know how much time was left so I keystyled real quick to be shure I didnt miss any deadline

This was feedback posted for DV8
 

THATS FUCKIN CRAZY. ASIde from da story ur flow and word play kept me on track to ur point n pace.

that last post was supposed to b for wonka. but dv8s verse was very powerful tho ur topic was general ur verse was definitly unique.

ps. how da fuck did u figure mr. washington beat me.damn dat hurt.

Sorry Man^^i Might Be Reading 2 Much...you Might Wanna Check Out..rb Complaints

Voted For: DV8

Willys verse was pretty dope, i liked the story line you went with on it, but i just thought these lines from DV8 were stronger....


I was young but I knew that I wanted to raise you as my own,
Cause I never wanted your precious little heart to feel alone,
And although there is no biological tie between use that binds,
There ain’t no blood test that can tell me you ain’t mines,
And Its never been kept a secret who your real father is,
But that bastard don’t even know what your favourite colour is
When you have a bad dream, you scream my name not his,
Sometimes I wounder if you found me or if I found you,
Your lifes already been hard enough, I see the strength in you,
So you see our life and immediate family is priority,
Im here for support n I’ll never try ta come done like authority,
The older you get, the closer we get, its actually hard for me,
Cause I gotta realistically look upon tomorrow n be bothered,
I dread the first time your mad at me and say “your not my real father”


Dady ill never say that…..no honey..its just a proven fact….. -

This had raw emotion- it was real, and i like readin shit like this alot, you flowed pretty well and there was alot of different feelings thrown in this- i could feel the loyalty in the story- dope peice stay up... 1

uppin this com'on peeps don't sleep on this.................

Upping, stop sleep and just get this over with. Hurry up.

Voted For: DV8

Dv8 ur rhymes were simple u kept it clean
nice structure Dwag
nice flows
nice Punches had great effect to me very
good/
it was original and cool well kept
vote Dv8