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*Phantom* 08-13-05 03:06 PM

Batman vs Unrestricted
 
Battle Rules:

8 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting


Minimum posts to vote: 20

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System 08-13-05 03:08 PM

Unrestricted has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-13-05 03:08 PM.

*Phantom* 08-13-05 03:09 PM

lets go bat-boy....................................

*Phantom* 08-13-05 04:24 PM

come on man, ur a noob battaling a vet, get real man wat the fuck
ur flow is like ur personality, dark and gloomy, so i guess ill have to "light" u up
jus cuz i got a better flow and harder punches than u do im the item of ur despise
what the hell u hating for, o yeah i know, cuz my flow is faster than that car u drive
u aint even accept the battle yet, dont give me that "my own pace"
da only reason dis nigga come out at night so in the good light we cant see his ugly face
come on nigga for real man, get real and quit ur night job, u aint doing shit anyway
cuz no matter what u doing u still nothing but a herb bitch all the fucking day

fucking owned.....upping for votes...post ur verse nigga......

System 08-13-05 06:19 PM

Batman has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-13-05 06:19 PM.

Batman 08-13-05 06:32 PM

i put a bounty on ya head,fill ya wit lead,wont stop till ya dead

u were asked if u wanted pussy and u said wut the fuck,battle me bitch,?ur a sittin duck

and dont cry too much when u git merked by me,u should retire cuz ur rymes r gittin older than movies starrin bruce lee

u call the police on me,for abusin u verbally,i bombed on u uncontrolably

u should take cheap ass rymes and throw em out,i aint gotta rap cuz this shyt is a blow out

i can get to downtown gotham by the batmobile quick,the only way u can go quick is by ridin ur pops dick

this is like the red sox 1 title compared to the yankees 26,to calm urself down u need to suck a couple dicks

and let me know how ur mom felt last night,next time if you want me to go eay on you... i just might

Batman 08-13-05 06:33 PM

where it says if u want me to go eay on u i just might...where it say eay it is spose to be easy...i fucked up...my bad

noname 08-13-05 06:54 PM

Voted For: Unrestricted

i put a bounty on ya head,fill ya wit lead,wont stop till ya dead
^^not a punch....0/10
u were asked if u wanted pussy and u said wut the fuck,battle me bitch,?ur a sittin duck
^^post link to him sayin that....2/10
and dont cry too much when u git merked by me,u should retire cuz ur rymes r gittin older than movies starrin bruce lee
^^Basic as fuck.....1/10
u call the police on me,for abusin u verbally,i bombed on u uncontrolably
^^did he call police on you?..proof?...fake personal?...2/10
u should take cheap ass rymes and throw em out,i aint gotta rap cuz this shyt is a blow out
^^Not a punch....0/10
i can get to downtown gotham by the batmobile quick,the only way u can go quick is by ridin ur pops dick
^^how is riding his pops...go quicK?..0/10
this is like the red sox 1 title compared to the yankees 26,to calm urself down u need to suck a couple dicks
^^didn't rhyme well....1/10
and let me know how ur mom felt last night,next time if you want me to go eay on you... i just might
^^Not a punch.

My god...this was bad.OK...first put ya structure normal...like how ya oppenent and 90% of this site does.Flow was ite...tho some lines didn't rhyme.Punches...well...there barely were punches.It was just you talking shit.Like that 1st and last bar for example...they weren't punches...it didn't diss at all.Then there were some lines like you talkin bout he called police on you...when there was no link..& I doubt it's true...so fake personal.The rest of ur lines were basic punches.WORK ON EVERYTHING.

come on man, ur a noob battaling a vet, get real man wat the fuck
ur flow is like ur personality, dark and gloomy, so i guess ill have to "light" u up
^^hmm......not all that....3/10
jus cuz i got a better flow and harder punches than u do im the item of ur despise
what the hell u hating for, o yeah i know, cuz my flow is faster than that car u drive
^^OK.....4/10
u aint even accept the battle yet, dont give me that "my own pace"
da only reason dis nigga come out at night so in the good light we cant see his ugly face
^^hmm....I asume you base'n it on his name..so ite..4/10
come on nigga for real man, get real and quit ur night job, u aint doing shit anyway
cuz no matter what u doing u still nothing but a herb bitch all the fucking day
^^Meh...basic...3/10

Welll....this verse seemed like a free to me.DIdn't seem like you tried...and you didn't need to neither.Those 2 light bars you have...I assume you based it on his Batman name...so it's all good.Lines were basic as fuck...tho not as much as Batman's.Structure was ite...flow stayed ok throughout the verse.

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Daubs 08-13-05 06:55 PM

Voted For: Unrestricted

lol at his verse.............

You take it for a better struct, flow, punches, vocab and everythin else#!!

rtf in sig homie.

*Phantom* 08-13-05 08:54 PM

thx......upping this shit.........................

Peace Back 08-13-05 09:00 PM

Voted For: Batman

Batman:

i put a bounty on ya head,fill ya wit lead,wont stop till ya dead
^nice, hard opener, triple rhyme

u were asked if u wanted pussy and u said wut the fuck,battle me bitch,?ur a sittin duck
^good quote, but make the quote clearer (like by using quotes, or a quote box)

and dont cry too much when u git merked by me,u should retire cuz ur rymes r gittin older than movies starrin bruce lee
^this line had potential, but too long and lost some flow
u call the police on me,for abusin u verbally,i bombed on u uncontrolably
^haha, pretty good
u should take cheap ass rymes and throw em out,i aint gotta rap cuz this shyt is a blow out
^don't get ahead of yourself bro, just rap
i can get to downtown gotham by the batmobile quick,the only way u can go quick is by ridin ur pops dick
^Great line. fulfilling your name gimick, and great analogy mixed with personal insult
this is like the red sox 1 title compared to the yankees 26,to calm urself down u need to suck a couple dicks
^ Nice factual statistics, but you don't clarify who is like which team, then the sentence gets too long..
changes meaning, and you already used "dick" before
and let me know how ur mom felt last night,next time if you want me to go eay on you... i just might
^Decent closing

Un:
come on man, ur a noob battaling a vet, get real man wat the fuck
^using "man, twice in the same line makes you look at a loss for words or syllables
ur flow is like ur personality, dark and gloomy, so i guess ill have to "light" u up
^good insult on the personality, but flow has nothing to do with that
jus cuz i got a better flow and harder punches than u do im the item of ur despise
^self glor
what the hell u hating for, o yeah i know, cuz my flow is faster than that car u drive
^flow has nothing to do with speed, as long as it doesn't change
u aint even accept the battle yet, dont give me that "my own pace"
da only reason dis nigga come out at night so in the good light we cant see his ugly face
^hahaha, nice; good insult, and quote (2 lines up)
come on nigga for real man, get real and quit ur night job, u aint doing shit anyway
^using "real twice in a row just doesn't cut it, and you contradict yourself...
^Unless you mean that rapping is his night job, in which you failed to clarify.
cuz no matter what u doing u still nothing but a herb bitch all the fucking day
^Sorry, sad ending. pick one, herb or bitch. Not a good personal. Do you even know
what a herb is?

Good job to both. Batman gets this vote: better opening, closing, imagery.
Both could work on the flow.

*Phantom* 08-13-05 09:04 PM

r u fucking kidding me?....w/e.....upping......i fucking owned this cat.....

Batman 08-13-05 09:10 PM

if u woulda owned me that much u wouldnt have had any votes against u...uppin...u dont me shit bitch

Daubs 08-13-05 09:16 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by Peace Back
Voted For: Batman

Batman:

i put a bounty on ya head,fill ya wit lead,wont stop till ya dead
^nice, hard opener, triple rhyme

u were asked if u wanted pussy and u said wut the fuck,battle me bitch,?ur a sittin duck
^good quote, but make the quote clearer (like by using quotes, or a quote box)



:roll: :laugh: :laugh2: omg.....................

*Phantom* 08-13-05 09:16 PM

^who da fuck u talkin to like that hoe?....look at ur verse and look at mine....ur shit is everywhere nigga....so sdfu and think before u type shit to me herb....


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