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Acknowledged hey yall please leave comments on dis and on mt utha poems
Acknowledged In the shores of hidden hurt I lurk Fuelled by anger I heroically stand Broken dreams and vows brushed aside Within my eyes prowl lessons Fronting like I can’t be messaged Knowing there isn’t no other path Breathing hoping this one will be my last Don’t place accusations against me God threw down blankets of depression I’m despised because I’m being real Creator not knowing why I was produced I’m violent flow considered a threat Come out of sitcoms and accept reality Pretending to be your idols don’t help It’s gonna hurt more when it bashes you It’s gonna send icy pulsations throw your soul That’s why I acknowledge the devastation now I am not an angel but I hunger to be accepted My intentions like ropes pulling me threw Good is being compressed threw me Yet I still keep to my place in society My package will be damaged if I turn my back Except your place, pay a visit to reality Don’t be mad at me for bringing the truth Confess to where you crop up in this sphere See, when your finished finding blue’s clues You have to head for the exit, it’s a one way road It’ll hit you like a sandstorm on the vacant desert I will not smile, lift my head and say I told you so I’ll continue in my benz, journey on my road Nobody stopped to help me, so I’ll let u get to your feet Blue’s Clues is therapy for no established man I acknowledged it now you simply failed to understand By Lena Arshad |
Hey yall id lyke u 2 leave ya comments it dnt need 2 b an essay jus a simple yeh i felt it or naw i think u suck
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I Think It Was Decent. It Kinda Lost My Interest Tho, Because There Was Nothing That Really Caught My Attention. You Had Good Word Play, And Pretty Good Vocab, But I Didnt Really Feel Any Depth To The Poem. You Had Good Visuals, But No Real Story Line, Or Any Shit Like That. It Was Decent Tho. Work On What You Write And Try To Make It More Deep Thro The Way Your Word Things, Try To Set A Mood For The Poem, Like Sorrow, Anger, Happiness, Ect.
Decent Work Tho Keep Writing |
thnx could u do me a fave and check out my utha poems pweze
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maybe u would get more feed back if u gave others feed back..
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GOOD SHIT I liked it i give it a 7.9/10
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yo man i leave fedback on uthas stuff 2 dey still dnt leave feedback on mine
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It was pretty iight what makes a good poet is connecting with the reader...vocab is good,as long as they understand... 7/10 feed mine if you feel... |
this was good,never seen you in here before,but no tbad gurl...i liked the subject, and the flow,,good job,just leave replies to thers work..pc
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Yo Man Yall Check Out My Utha Poems One's Called Thoughts And The Utha Is Called Her Book
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