Mike Hawk Vs. Conclusion
Mike Hawk (East Coast) Vs. Conclusion (England)
Check In by 12:00 AM Eastern Time On Monday November 8th Verse due by 12:00 AM Eastern Time On Wednesday November 10th Votes due by 12:00 AM Eastern Time On Saturday November 13th 10-30 Lines I Will Decide The Topic No Biting No Recycling No D/R Votes No Crew Votes No Hate Votes No Bullshit Good Luck The Topic Is : Your Face To Face With The Person Who Slaughtered Your Child, What Would You Do? |
Chea.........................
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Checka-Checka...........
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Killer's name is Mr. Smith
Face to face with 'em, looking to straight kill 'em.
Soul might fly away, but the body won't escape wit 'em Thinkin bout puttin the 9 to 'em, then clap at his head Like 2pac said, one of the sweetest joys is revenge He's looking at me, like 'Dawg, wtf you gon' tryna do!' Thinking, *damn, I wanna see these bullets go right through u* He took a puff at his blunt, started looking and smiled..... 'Whatchu got, pull it out, you'll end up like ya child' Laughin, I'm ready to smash em, bang the shotty........ But then, the consequences, what if they find the body? What if the do me like Gotti, toss me in the bing for years. Is it worth it? I'm needed here. Is it worth those tears......? Kid is cocky, he thinks his psychology can stop me He know either I get killed by him, or the D's gon pop me. *Man walks in, see's me* 'Hey easy Papi........... I got a wife and 3 kids, that'd kill THEM...... if you shot ME' 'Infact I do , tell em the story, what this man did to me...' Then the killer says 'Haha, and lemme tell you dawg, it was easy B' *Puerto Rican guy: 'Oh shit son, you really did that to this man' Killer: Hell yea, 5 shots to the gut, and I'd get at the rest of his fam Me: Yeah son? Well right now I'm glad you filled em wit lead, jokes on you instead Killer:Huh?....................................... ................................................. ......Puerto Rican: Mr. Smith, I'm an undercover agent, put ya hands over ur head Yup, Yup... |
Basic Story: I Return Back to the Site where My Son Was Murdered-Because I Receive a Phonecall From The Killer, Who Wishe's To Meet..After seeing My Appeal For Wittnesse's...
Slowly, I Pace Up To The Killer That Slaughtered My Child
Sense's Overheating, Everything's Surreal-Emotion's Going Wild Preoccupied With Vision's Of Method's To Gain My Vengeance Running, Pussying Out-These are Not Among My Intention's The Time&Cold Aura That Glaze's This Creature's Eye's Gaze's Into Mine, I Can See Him Bustin' a Smirk, Musta Did this Countless Time's Thinking [italic]"This Is The Monster That Destroyed My World-My Kin"[/italic] I Stare Back At Him and Cringe, He Show's No Remorse...For That Sin I Did'nt Know where to Begin, "Should i Negotiate Or Merk Him Slow"? Thinking This Is The Same Corner, He Trapped My Son-Who had No-Where To Go Reciting The Injurie's My Son Had Been Inflicted and Sustained Pondering How could a Grown Man Terrorize a Small Child and Cause Him Pain? I've Got My Hand in My Pocket...With a Small Kitchen Knife..Ready To Attack But Then Remembering...He's a Killer Must have summin Planned-Should I Risk That? The Monster Grin's and say's "I Can Almost See Ya Son standing In Front" Enraging My Emotion's , Memory Gradually Slipping-Thought's Becoming Blunt I Reply " You To Much Of a Pussy, You Take It Out On Kid's and Little One's"? He Say's "Naw..I Like Destroying Life's Especially Hater's With Little Son's" That Remark Jogged My Memory, This was Edward Hawkin's He Had a Brother He Topped Himself, He Got Bullied Dad Was Deceased-Shortly after..His Mother I remember this Kid Was Fucked Up, I used to despise Him Back In 9th Grade Had Mad Beef-The Dude was Heartless-Used To Think He Was Bitchmade Edward was on his own ever since His Family Was Torn Apart Thing was, I Felt For him but i just did'nt retain the heart Then I returned To The situation, He Gripped a Colt In His Hand I Forgave Him, Because Straight After *Gun Cock's* BLAM!!!! Aight that was a Quickie... |
damn good battle y'all... too bad i can't vote. But props to both on this one... should be really close with the edge slightly favoring _______________ !
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That Help's...lol...
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no votes......................
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wtf@this bullshit..................
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Where's the Vote's...?-This Tourney is Fucked Up...should have a Voting Scheme....
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.::Aight I'ma Break It Down::. ::.Mike Hawk 6/10.:: Well First Off Your Flow Was Off..It Was Hard To Flow That Topical. Your Imagery Was Basic and Indistinctive. Also Your Vocabulary and Sentence Structure Needs To Be Worked On. You Have Potential Just Elevate With Time. ::.Conclusion 8/10.:: You Had Nice Flow At Points and Then Sometimes You Had The Flow Fallen Off. Your Vocabulary Is Nice, and Your Direction With Imagery Is Decent. Only Thing You Need To Elevate On Is Concistency and Sentence Structure As Well. Nice Drops From Both. Winner - Conclusion ~R~ |
Thank's for the Vote.
Come on let's get some more. |
Why Don't You and Mike Hit Up My Battle With Newport?
I Think Its The Only Other One Open In This Topical Thing LOL.. ~R~ |
More Vote's....Mayne This shit Take's Age's..........
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mike pretty simple drop,ya vocab needs work.wasnt terrible but couldve done better i think.....ya closer was aight.....
con-imagery was koo,vocab was better then mikes n ya overall plot was more intrigue'n...i wasnt feelin ya closer much but overall it was a better drop.... vote/conclusion. |
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