True Life Hero....hate Me Now Instr.
 

this is just part of the 1st verse of this song....its about a soldier in iraq...just something i am feeling right now....its to the hate me now instrumental.....please give me some feedback on this.....if u think its wack...tell me.....if u think its hot...tell me....thanks

TRUE LIFE HERO

Hault regular lives, steps aside for the lessened hype/
as he accepts the pride to provide and its somewhat unrecognized//
but lets it slide cuz he catches vibes/
from the techs and nines//
each moment less deprived of outlooks on aspects of life/
the test is right here to make it out iraq alive//
writes his family letters just so he can pass the time/
half the time you wonder what goes through his criminal mastermind//
the truth is he wants to get back to what he calls disaster;life/............................................


tell me what u think

Pretty dope, wish it was longer, flow was really good, vocab was pretty decent, nothing really bad to say about this. Just make er longer, and it's will be a dope open mic. I never really heard hate me now, so i don't really know the beat, but i just read it the way i felt you meant it was spoe to be read, and it flowed really well that way.

Anywho keep droppin,
much respect

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thanks for the props....i know that you have heard the hate me now beat....the nas and diddy song..

somebody hit me with some feedback

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cmon hit me wit some feedback

damnit can someone hit me with some feedback....shit

i give feed to alot of yall.....and i get none back.....please can i get some feedback.....damn

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Yo,,,hommie this was a dope piece an the word play was hot
I hope to see more from you soon,,,9-10 :thumbup:

thanks.....youll see more of me....uppin for more feed

yo like verbatim said... wish it was a lil longer...
but other than that.. this shit was str8
nice vocab... and u should record dat shit wit da beat..
cuz its a hot beat and peeps would really feel ya flow den...
nice shit tho.. 9/10

it was ok but ya need to lose the / // bits we know where the verse ends lol...and i got that beat too and im using it now lol

5.5/10 kepp droppin though u'll improve :thumbup:

i wasnt feeling this, it wasnt deep enuff, a peice like this needs to be deep, u had too many fillers an some lines didnt connect at all

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blah this fuckin sucked...(you can hate me now)....:)