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da countup-A FUCKIN MUST READ!!!
***please read it ALL...thanx*** artist: dolla bill track: Da Countup album: n/a verse 1: two blocks full of pay'dro... niggaz gettin shot in tha hood ova them bankrolls, just because we said so... settin standards by tha bus loads, case closed... niggaz jump stupid and get shot ova tha car they drove... we know tha streets like AIDS know tha gay man... our brains corrupt, you see tha panties in our kat-scans... spittin at shawty, she talkin shit bout how she got a man... so i told tha bitch straight up, "hoe fuck yo man"... rollin down yo block in a black van wit black tent... wit dem glocks hangin out tha window like dis is it!... bustin caps like got em free from a stupid bitch... it feel like a million and one once they hit yo tissue and shit... (so you black out) look at you, shouldve been on dat mature tip... now you lumped up and we know you hurt by tha way you twitch... shouldve paid me my money and shit... now i gotta steal it, glad you aint snitch before you died bitch... (im like)... hook: (1,2) riot is comin for you... (3,4) you betta lock your door... (5,6) he got machetes and shit... (7,8) dont procrastinate... (9,10) hes at it again... (so you betta watch yo back...BITCH!) verse 2: i pop bullets like i pop cherries, real big... and i aim at tha same people, men, women, and kids... i'll kill, repent and then revict again... we all gotta die in dis fucked up life dat i live... and da life dat i live in is complete wit nothin but sorrow... where gangbangas and drugdealas murk and ask questions tommarrow... where lil kids fill body bags six days out tha week... and sunday is cold cuz funeral lines fill da street... so we stick wit our heat cuz if they blast, we blastin too... get an attitude and hot shells will be yo final food... dont fuel our feud cuz most of yall is da softest dudes... yall fail to sneak and kill like killaz so yall cant pass like in school... dont act like its cool cuz yo momz and girl can get it too... three moves and you lose like foolsmate except we playin chess wit crews... hate to admit but yall niggaz cant fill my shoes... yall set up to crossed like im hotsause doin what he do... look me up muthafucka, da kid is known to be true... (so im still like)... hook: (1,2) riot is comin for you... (3,4) you betta lock your door... (5,6) he got machetes and shit... (7,8) dont procrastinate... (9,10) hes at it again... (so you betta watch yo back...BITCH!) |
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=173295
CAN A NIGGA GET SOME FEEDBACK PLEASE...DONT SLEEP ON DIS 1...4REAL |
oh yeah...pay attention to tha second verse...some of tha coldest multis i have eva wrote...4real
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uuuuppppiiiiinnnn dis...GIVE ME FEEDZ PLZ...cmon
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ummm you really didnt have many multis in the 2nd verse..............not too great........too basic for me......and i didnt like the topic...........sorry no hate......up your vocab, wordplay, structure, metas, and multis.......i give this 3/10
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thanx^^^...no hate taken...i understand ya...but to me i got bout 80% of tha 2nd verse on multis alone...do you know what multis are my nig?...might not but here is an example of some of my multis... "so we stick wit our heat cuz if they blast, we blastin too... get an attitude and hot shells will be yo final food... dont fuel our feud cuz most of yall is da softest dudes... yall fail to sneak and kill like killaz so yall cant pass like in school..." those are multis...so i take no hate from what you said cuz i know what im doin...uppin for more feedback though...yall know what tha deal is...~1~ |
well i wasn't feelin the topic and it was basic but it was pretty good for the basic verse that has all the multis at the end and shit. check out my "Rap's in trouble" freestyle or my "fastlane" freestyle and you'll see what i mean by not havin all the multis at the end. Anyway check em out good drop it's ya boy the blackmage signin out
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thanx...i'll get back at u...more feedz please!
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can i get more feedz on dis one...lets get it crackin niggaz and wiggaz and ladies...damn
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it was aight man....no offence but them multis aint that dope...but there aight overall it werent 2 bad man - 7.5/10 ~1~ Peace :thumbup: keep droppin
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thanx homie...i understand...i will get betta believe me...my next OM will be sumthin special...4real...~1~
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can a nigga get more feed plz... :thumbup:
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yea the track was cool ad all but as you can see the problem was the topic. the whole schme you was tryin to put together on the drop didnt really keep my interest goin for motivation to get into the song. So once again the verses was aight, but i didnt like the topic. 5.5/10 no hate
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thanx...uppin still...4real
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