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Civil. 06-03-07 07:04 PM

Round 4: Lay Fear 3-0 .vs Gkillaz 3-0
 
Battles Up Tuesday.
House Rules 10-14 lines
Verses Due Friday.
Voting Ends Monday Night
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G' luck to everyone.
Double Elimination

Lay. 06-03-07 11:20 PM

check check niggie,...good luck' lolz

Lay. 06-05-07 11:34 PM

eyy..g
ya crews whack dude,..ya suck n don't hate when I kill cowards
so when I break the bridge of ya rap,..the one in London will cower
originality?..name sucks n is whack, so I'll leave these gays blazed
cuz use Gap,n ya original name is nothin more than a played phrase
lol..to easy, ya mom sucks ma dick so simply she gives this vet dome
cuz cowhide aint a material,..its what I tell his mom when G gets home
you got no skill..but alot of posts, so I guess thats your sole curse
ya didnt' make the deadline,..< n that plural sum's up ya whole verse!
ya need to rethink battlin,..I can tell ya ain't gettin better from ya game
cuz u coudlnt' be 'ill'...if ya removed the rest of the letters from ya name!


:laugh:

GKillaz05 06-06-07 09:21 PM

Lay Fear your not richboy he's hated more then a snitch...
So wit' ya name you might as well throw a d in dat bitch... LaDy Fear!
...Your perfect record on RapVerse you just blown it...
Ya gettin owned kid...
Lay Fear the only thing you run is away from your opponents...
I'll twist up your name...
Leavin' voters laf 4 yearz...
...you just have a small buzz like half a beer...
Talk about me not bein' ill?.. homie this is pure game...
Your lame, the letter L is the only thing truthful in ya name...
This meals begun...Lay steals for fun...
Above me the 8 Mile Quote the only thing clever he wrote...
I got steal lungz, so verse this herb I will never choke...
Ima end your shit, He's weak when he SENs a hit,
Got Lay like mighty duck, then I might win the championship...
I'm lappin' him quick....
And he's lays so you know ima eat more then one...
Even in a car race...
A punch fear could never fourmula one...


a new style I guess you could call it?.. lol, just a quit keystyle.. 7Barz=14linez goodluck homie!

Dickard. 06-06-07 10:36 PM

Lay, i wish you took this more serious..this battle was a lot closer than I expected it to be wow lol.

you got no skill..but alot of posts, so I guess thats your sole curse
ya didnt' make the deadline,..< n that plural sum's up ya whole verse!
ya need to rethink battlin,..I can tell ya ain't gettin better from ya game
cuz u coudlnt' be 'ill'...if ya removed the rest of the letters from ya name!


vs.

And he's lays so you know ima eat more then one...
Even in a car race...
A punch fear could never fourmula one...



But I've got lay fear winning this by 1 punch..both only had a few quotables...and lay fear edged it out ...good battle guys

GKillaz05 06-06-07 10:39 PM

thx for the vote, funny thing is the punch you gave him sayin' was good was bs, cuz I didnt miss the deadline, but it was still an iight concept I guess.... and what you mean, this battle shouldnt have been close?.. like I'm whack or somethin?

Lay. 06-07-07 08:17 AM

Lolz..Thanks for the vote Mys...ummm uppinnn

Ransum 06-07-07 04:23 PM

ya crews whack dude,..ya suck n don't hate when I kill cowards
so when I break the bridge of ya rap,..the one in London will cower
weak start...
originality?..name sucks n is whack, so I'll leave these gays blazed
cuz use Gap,n ya original name is nothin more than a played phrase
nah...
lol..to easy, ya mom sucks ma dick so simply she gives this vet dome
cuz cowhide aint a material,..its what I tell his mom when G gets home
aight...
you got no skill..but alot of posts, so I guess thats your sole curse
ya didnt' make the deadline,..< n that plural sum's up ya whole verse!
aight...
ya need to rethink battlin,..I can tell ya ain't gettin better from ya game
cuz u coudlnt' be 'ill'...if ya removed the rest of the letters from ya name!
nice ending...

the ending was ya best line.. the begining really was weak but you picked it up...






Lay Fear your not richboy he's hated more then a snitch...
So wit' ya name you might as well throw a d in dat bitch... LaDy Fear!
eeh but ok...
...Your perfect record on RapVerse you just blown it...
Ya gettin owned kid...
Lay Fear the only thing you run is away from your opponents...
eeh...
I'll twist up your name...
Leavin' voters laf 4 yearz...
...you just have a small buzz like half a beer...
aight...
Talk about me not bein' ill?.. homie this is pure game...
Your lame, the letter L is the only thing truthful in ya name...
understand what ya did.. but maybe you need it better wording but i wasnt feeling it...

This meals begun...Lay steals for fun...
Above me the 8 Mile Quote the only thing clever he wrote...
I got steal lungz, so verse this herb I will never choke...
3 line for a punch eeh streched... but aight punch
Ima end your shit, He's weak when he SENs a hit,
Got Lay like mighty duck, then I might win the championship...
I'm lappin' him quick....
nah..
And he's lays so you know ima eat more then one...
Even in a car race...
A punch fear could never fourmula one...
decent ending...


sadly gkillah if ya verse wasnt so up's and down with punches and streched line you would of got my vote...
but your verse was all ova the place at times you did aight then next bar was like WTF?? no hate man but i think lay fear got you on this one for more consistent verse....

lay fear by a hair....

vote: lay fear

Dickard. 06-08-07 11:19 AM

idk wut i meant by that lol...i dont even remember writing that...guess i did...oh well..dont be offended

Kid Blitz 06-09-07 12:29 AM

eyy..g
ya crews whack dude,..ya suck n don't hate when I kill cowards
so when I break the bridge of ya rap,..the one in London will cower
meh k
originality?..name sucks n is whack, so I'll leave these gays blazed
cuz use Gap,n ya original name is nothin more than a played phrase
haha ok
lol..to easy, ya mom sucks ma dick so simply she gives this vet dome
cuz cowhide aint a material,..its what I tell his mom when G gets home
rotfl
you got no skill..but alot of posts, so I guess thats your sole curse
ya didnt' make the deadline,..< n that plural sum's up ya whole verse!
ok
ya need to rethink battlin,..I can tell ya ain't gettin better from ya game
cuz u coudlnt' be 'ill'...if ya removed the rest of the letters from ya name!
meh simple but ok

vs.

Lay Fear your not richboy he's hated more then a snitch...
So wit' ya name you might as well throw a d in dat bitch... LaDy Fear!
...Your perfect record on RapVerse you just blown it...
nah
Ya gettin owned kid...
Lay Fear the only thing you run is away from your opponents...
I'll twist up your name...
Leavin' voters laf 4 yearz...
nah
...you just have a small buzz like half a beer...
Talk about me not bein' ill?.. homie this is pure game...
Your lame, the letter L is the only thing truthful in ya name...
meh k
This meals begun...Lay steals for fun...
Above me the 8 Mile Quote the only thing clever he wrote...
I got steal lungz, so verse this herb I will never choke...
nah
Ima end your shit, He's weak when he SENs a hit,
Got Lay like mighty duck, then I might win the championship...
I'm lappin' him quick....
nah
And he's lays so you know ima eat more then one...
Even in a car race...
A punch fear could never fourmula one...
no...rhymed one...

*GKillaz you need alot of structure and practice...if this was a freestyle ok...but i didnt see one punch connect wit him...Lay Fear took dis easily...

V/Lay Fear

Civil. 06-09-07 01:07 AM

Wow, another surprise.


Lay-Nothin near as good as you dropped in 1-2 this week. But ok. Your
verse wasn't that great, but a few punches there. I liked some of your
concepts in this one, i think you finally followed through with 1 or 2 bars
that were fresh. The rest were ok, nothin really harsh. I think you could
have done better against him, and i happen to know that your one of the
better writers as far as punctuation and wording. In this one you kind of,
slacked in that area. Stay on point.

G-Damn dude, this shit definately didn't work out for you. LOL, i'm sure on
the mic it sounded straight i guess. but reading it in a text battle, i don't
think you did so hot. Your flow throughout the whole verse kept changing.
You had ok multis but they didn't even connect with each other. I don't feel
you threw punches at him. I think it was just a simple key that was weak.
Definately not the way to defend a 3-0 record.


V/Lay. One sided battle.

GKillaz05 06-09-07 03:15 AM

I dont understand why you people care so much about the way its set up.. all I did was make a one line into three in some spots, so if I wouldnt have hit enter and kept it all one line it would have been fine? So if it works in audio it cant work in text, that makes alot of fuckin' sence! Whatever though, good battle.. props lay!

Dickard. 06-09-07 12:04 PM

see thats where your wrong g, just cuz it works in audio..doesnt mean it works in text.

because it's to entirley different things. You set your structure up in an audio thing to the beat. Theres no beat in text. So the flow will end up being all over the place. Which is why it is important to pay attention to that shit.

just lookin out man.

GKillaz05 06-09-07 12:48 PM

I still do not see where my verse doesnt flow?

Antonio Banderas 06-09-07 06:09 PM

ya crews whack dude,..ya suck n don't hate when I kill cowards
so when I break the bridge of ya rap,..the one in London will cower
Dope opener, bout time someone has a good opener, LOL
originality?..name sucks n is whack, so I'll leave these gays blazed
cuz use Gap,n ya original name is nothin more than a played phrase
nice
lol..to easy, ya mom sucks ma dick so simply she gives this vet dome
cuz cowhide aint a material,..its what I tell his mom when G gets home
Wak
you got no skill..but alot of posts, so I guess thats your sole curse
ya didnt' make the deadline,..< n that plural sum's up ya whole verse!
barely descent
ya need to rethink battlin,..I can tell ya ain't gettin better from ya game
cuz u coudlnt' be 'ill'...if ya removed the rest of the letters from ya name!
Wak ender
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Lay Fear your not richboy he's hated more then a snitch...
So wit' ya name you might as well throw a d in dat bitch... LaDy Fear!
...Your perfect record on RapVerse you just blown it...
Ya gettin owned kid...
No
Lay Fear the only thing you run is away from your opponents...
I'll twist up your name...
Leavin' voters laf 4 yearz...
...you just have a small buzz like half a beer...
Nice, but fix your structure dude
Talk about me not bein' ill?.. homie this is pure game...
Your lame, the letter L is the only thing truthful in ya name...
Nah
This meals begun...Lay steals for fun...
Above me the 8 Mile Quote the only thing clever he wrote...
I got steal lungz, so verse this herb I will never choke...
No
Ima end your shit, He's weak when he SENs a hit,
Got Lay like mighty duck, then I might win the championship...
wording fucked his all up
I'm lappin' him quick....
And he's lays so you know ima eat more then one...
Even in a car race...
A punch fear could never fourmula one...
barely descent ender

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Vote - Lay Fear


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