Intro (for my cd...mini track)
 

Its not a skit or anything.
Im thinking bout using it for an intro into my first track.

Peep the Jet SoundEffects in it....I placed em in there ;)

The quality aint so great. still on my socom headset.
But the Volume is at a good rate, which is usually my prob.

Anyways.
Peep it, an drop your opinion on it. (Be Blunt an Honest PLEASE)

I personally like it an I hate 99% of my shit.
I actually put work into it. -1

Intro

i like the classical sounds in the beat, but i have to admit,it sounds like you always sound,not nessecarily a bad thing, but for an intro, do something different to catch peoples ears and attention....you probably didnt want to do a skit, but maybe something a little more upbeat..not bad tho...your rhymin is on point..11

this was better than normal seriously,i love the beat,nice rhyming,beat is incredibly dope,try to change your voice or try to change intonation i admit thats its like the other songs but i very adore this song very good

ight, u know i don't normally feel ur shit... but this had a "its not bad" quality about it... i dunno, it was same as Im used to hearin from you, but it wasn't bad, only thing that stops me from feelin it is the quality, which is still a little crickety cuz of the socom set, and ur rhymescheme that i can't get into... but this was cool, i liked the beat, definate intro beat... keep pissin kids off :throwup: 1

actually i was feelin this quality was gud lyrics was cool flow in some spots needs more change ups but over i liked it good intro

DEF turn down the about...7500+mhz range on your vocals. They zing like a bitch. I still absolutely hate your deliv and repetitive rhymescheme. The lyrics them selves were pretty goood, bu your deliv just sounds like you're whining, like "nyah nyee nyah nyeee nyaaahh nyaaaahh". It's abrasive. Flow was on, but that's no surprise. that's really all I can say about the track. Uno.

to me that sounds accapella with a piano in the distance?........was that the idea, like some spoken word or something.............ok here it comes, a jet..........you got to turn the beat up, way up, kind of a basic flow, and you cant not be riding the beat, cause I dont really hear it, ok here it goes, its picking up, nice, the beat is climbing and so is your voice, your right about the new mic, but i dont kno, you need to mix-blend that shit better. your vocab was good at points but other times it was preschool, but you dont always need the canabis type shit, the simple shit can work, and you brought some words in there, so it was a good drop, just need some adjustments. you got potential, and everybody on here says that, but you do, you just need better beats, or to turn them up, and a better mic, but you said that on the page..........I dont kno if it was good for an intro, cause an intro has to grab em, it has to be that shit, as soon as they throw it into their cd player, thats what they are goin to hear is that intro, you might want to come stronger with it. just my pennywise two cents. not bad though, I am just trying to help, peace and hip hop, determind

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