Ransum vs laxdnota
 

Battle Rules:

6 - 10 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

I KNOW RAP SO IF U SPIT IM GONNA CATCH YA

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 05-10-07 at 01:49 PM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.

laxdnota has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-07-07 01:50 PM.

Ransum has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-07-07 01:54 PM.

i dont know who you are...
what you here for...
or why you picked me...

but u soon gonna find out this was your worst mistake....
and who the fuck told you its cool to set up battles without asking for a battle???

ITS ON BITCH...

U Go First. Im Ready To Whoop U And Show U Im The Boss. Watch.

Invest in pride cuz my flow godly..i've blessed the tides
put tech to spines.. crushing these insect tossin this pest a side /
new guy wanna flex hes size, but no haps since hes at large with he's breast, guys
coming at you weak.. cuz i fear u'r skill's lack impact like crash landing fly's/
ok so maybe this'll be u'r last text battle, but he'll standing tall
could hang himself off a hook.. an hes shit still aint off the wall/
guess he pick'ed the best to mess with.. when the tech spit.. it'll make ya neck twist
impress this.. never! you lack wit.. and couldnt believe in yaself if you act-it/
gun i pack it, if i see beef i eat it then crap it
get beat an bash quick, and cut off like weed when i need it to ash it/ MOTHER FUCKAH....

even with all my battles i had today alone plus me going kinda brain dead already i still half assed it and did twice as better...an i still aint seen ya verse... BITCH..

YOU BEEN WHORED...

i admit my rap r low and dont achieve
but with the greed and envy i can believe
keystyling isnt my strong but songs r wat i live apon
ur raps r wrong and bring in jealousy
i dont really know u but i read around and did my research
ur lookin to get ur teeth murked and bp-vest warped and ripped short
ill rip u so hard ull have uyr family at a funeral in remorse
ur raps couldnt be worse but if u tak ur time and do ur research u might end up in billboards
my rhymes will t-k-o u cuz im t-r-u-2 the g-a-m-e
rock u till the wheels fall off and the bags all empty
ima cut ur balls off and sew them on ur chin
when u walk in a crowd the will grin
ull look back on this and say "yd i let him win?"
peace out. read this remember ur sin.

upp'in for votes...

and you actully getting better....

the more i see from you the better i notice you get keep at it kid...

thx man... i can write songs but i blow at this keytstyling.... im trying tho... i could think of an entire song off the top if my head right now and it would pwn.... not like dipset and all that other gay shit... like pac, big, nas, jigga, L, anyone thats actually good

see man i just wrote this in 2 minutes.... top of my head...




im back, its the d, its me
where u at i need u baby
ima search the world and find u baby
ill be by ur side so ill never be missed
if im not there for a min think of me
ill be there in a jiffy we can hit a quickie
shoulder to shoulder so ull never miss me baby
so dont fool around and ull always be with
ill get in the girls heart w/o the key
just me and the thing called l-o-v-E
ill take u to the place u love
where we can drink heavenly champagne
under the sky of fluttering white doves
this rap thing is a hobbie of mine
that i hold on to and stay ahead of my time
in these crazy times u need my crazy rhymes
i hope to get around the whole world
maybe meet the right girl
that will mean the world to me
give her my heart also called a ring
one knee, one chance, one yes, no no's
keep us strong and let the relationship grow
as long as ur hear for me and not the dough
ill hold u by my side and never let u go
ill treat with my love thats true
me and u, u can spend ur life with muah
cuz u no i love ya and never miss a minute with ya



wat do u like and wat do u not like?? plz cuz ima start recording my shit

Voted For: Ransum

Overall a better verse and was just more harsha nd his punches connected more....this came to be a slaughter man ransum just reigned over this dude and killed him seriously....shit was just ridiculous and was one sided... ransum takes this hands down being the aggrressor

im back, its the d, its me
where u at i need u lady
ima search the world and find u baby
ill be by ur side so ill never be missed
if im not there for a min think of me
ill be there in a jiffy we can hit a quickie
ill be in the light with u and it'll never be shady
so dont fool around and ull always be with me
ill get in the girls heart w/o the key
just me and the thing called l-o-v-E
ill take u to the place u love
where we can drink heavenly champagne
under the sky of fluttering white doves
this rap thing is a hobbie of mine
that i hold on to and stay ahead of my time
in these crazy times u need my crazy rhymes
i hope to get around the whole world
maybe meet the right girl
that will mean the world to me
give her my heart also called a ring
one knee, one chance, one yes, no no's
keep us strong and let the relationship grow
as long as ur hear for me and not the dough
ill hold u by my side and never let u go
ill treat with my love thats true
me and u, u can spend ur life with muah
cuz u no i love ya and never miss a minute with ya


I CHANGED A LOT OF THAT FIRST VERSE... it didnt sound right and im kind picky lol

stop droping ya wach rhymes in here and drop those in the cypher dude...
this is a battle not a fucking cypher or pratics form.....


upp'in for votes...

Voted For: Ransum

Ransum..im really un-impressed wit you in this verse...
he doesnt seem like much of a battle rapper morte of a keystylez cat...

i mean you punches were very soft the weakest ive evr seen them..you took this basically cuz he had no punches zero...but he's new so he has an excuse you dont...

FYI....you should cum hard everytime you spit cuz the one time you dont the weakest mc will drown you out....100 keep elevattttttttiiiinnnnn

Voted For: Ransum

Invest in pride cuz my flow godly..i've blessed the tides
put tech to spines.. crushing these insect tossin this pest a side /
<b>kinda played but funny, your best line by far haha</b<
new guy wanna flex hes size, but no haps since hes at large with he's breast, guys
coming at you weak.. cuz i fear u'r skill's lack impact like crash landing fly's/
<b>flow was choppy not really a strong punch at all</b>
ok so maybe this'll be u'r last text battle, but he'll standing tall
could hang himself off a hook.. an hes shit still aint off the wall/
<b>wow...meh idk decent but wording needs some tuning</b>
guess he pick'ed the best to mess with.. when the tech spit.. it'll make ya neck twist
impress this.. never! you lack wit.. and couldnt believe in yaself if you act-it/
<b>neck twist-act it? forced rhyme and mutlies.</b>
gun i pack it, if i see beef i eat it then crap it
get beat an bash quick, and cut off like weed when i need it to ash it/
<b>meh okay...nothing really</b>

overall: i think you had one decent bar, your whole verse flucuated from bad flow/structure to forced multies and rhyme scheme. Though i saw a lot of potential for a good verse. Where you started going with multies..yeah it flowed okay...but it took away from the impact of the punch..cuz you were rhyming but the power of punch was not there. and that was ur downfall...along with your structure...tune it up a bit so it flows better so its not as hard to follow brah.

vs.

i admit my rap r low and dont achieve
but with the greed and envy i can believe
<b>just rhymed...no punch</b>
keystyling isnt my strong but songs r wat i live apon
ur raps r wrong and bring in jealousy
i dont really know u but i read around and did my research
ur lookin to get ur teeth murked and bp-vest warped and ripped short
ill rip u so hard ull have uyr family at a funeral in remorse
ur raps couldnt be worse but if u tak ur time and do ur research u might end up in billboards
my rhymes will t-k-o u cuz im t-r-u-2 the g-a-m-e
rock u till the wheels fall off and the bags all empty
ima cut ur balls off and sew them on ur chin
when u walk in a crowd the will grin
ull look back on this and say "yd i let him win?"
peace out. read this remember ur sin.


overall:okay i read 2 bars and stopped the line for line, you had no punches incorporated into your entire verse. you just rabeled on like you had no idea what u were doing....maybe cuz u didnt...umm yeah read some tutorials..and dont put urself down in a battle...your suposed to do that to your opponent noob.

v/ransum