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Isolated Freedom
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http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3279143 Isolated Freedom Isolated freedom distorts my vision & breathing under lock & key so long my hairline's reseeding missed my son's birthday, even days of teething pacing back n forth, I angrily await the next feeding handcuff abrasions limit my wrists' movements the swelling decreased to reveal reddish bruises insinuating pain leds me to grind my teeth heavily still recovering from solitare..think its been a week the conception of time's irrelevant...as is my sentence 70 years for what! serving time for a tax evasion sentence What is freedom to a prisons..thoughts keep brain pounding Brains fatigued on my 19th escape plan, stuck on an island technological advices ensure I detail a plan B & C bashing my fist against the wall like I'm using T n T names not chisseled on wall..but echos down the hall prisoners showed respect even before I took the fall false flaggers are fight starters, tho most are harmless The only six figures I display are on prison garments .......... |
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good flow nice multis, hits was there, concpts decent a all around good drop
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good looking Mur..
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im feelin it it was all that but it definitly wasnt bad,i like your rymes and hot it flowed
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This Piece Was Good Here Good Vocab Nice Multi's Here And There...Also It Had Some Emotion Witch Is Always Good You Should Complete This In Audio
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I enjoyed the read!
Could of been a bit longer and dug into the depths of the peice. But it was still a good read. Your vocab is decent, nothing mind blowing, but for a brainless audience I guess it pays to dumb it down. lol. rhymes are simple. Structure is on point and the peice flows nice. Best Line Isolated freedom distorts my vision & breathing under lock & key so long my hairline's reseeding Best Rhyme Breathing ... Reseeding Worst line technological advices ensure I detail a plan B & C bashing my fist against the wall like I'm using T n T Worst rhyme B & C ... T & T Stay dropping |
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