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~inside the brain of a maniac~
~inside the brain of a maniac~
 As i enter thru the nose, i see his first child hood thought's
his dad beating his ma with empty bottles of port's Things seem distraught,like theres still missing peice's It seem's although since day one,hes been breathing in ether's I see his teacher's,they look @ him likes hes worthless Theres a cell sitting there asking,"do I really deserve this?" as I fold back a wall of skin,I get a huge shock I cant go any futher,as if it's a cerebellum road block Then I se another way round,it's a mental detour I pause for a minute,do i wanna see more? I catch my breath,continue to stride I see him in a situation,he's loosing his pride As I turn the next corner, I see the first cell of excitement It his 11th birthday he's overwellmed with enlightment folding back some more skin,to see what Ill find A big rush of hate's come's....Im now walking here blind I remind myself to mind my self This guy is classed as evil,no telling what his thoughts are like As I make it to the centre of his brain his blood pushe's into white cell's like hell the good side of his mind fight's while the negative prevail's taking over his mental reaction to certain curcumstances his eye's burn in hurtfull glance's of poverty he try's to think..."stay strong,dont let it bother me" but he grew up wanting to change it and be effective I see his writen screen play's,he's wishing he could direct it make it grow, connect it to the youth to be effective with the truth I see a memory of guy's allway's bringing down. As I walk past his ear's ,theres is a continuious ringing sound he's dreaming how he would ever make it to be signifigant I see his vision's of money and being treated magnificent he catche's a sent of sucess..he seen the rich,so why should he have less he has quest's to make or break it in his desired ocupation he still cant figure out why guy's fired upon an nation killing many when it was one man's word's that they heard he stired up a change reaction,worst than anything nuculear turns back to remember when he was just born since day one he know's he must thrust forward..... QUICK TOPICAL I DONE. ANY COMMENT'S WELCOME. |
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any feed? you lazy fucks. |
That was one beautiful work of Art.That seemed like it can be a classic
like at nas ranking.Seriously Man,Sig the link to this and don't take it out. It had graphicly described his mind,and not just thoughts the internal movements aswell.You seriously Inspired me to the point where I need to bow to you. If people don't recognise your genious people need to discontinue rappin seriously. You defeated me in terms of skill fam.....good,no great job,no perfect job lol peace |
dude nuthin funner than whackin someone with an empty bottle u should try it
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i do that to myself sometimes cause i get so bored
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Thanks for the feed indeph. hood dawg please dont post pointless comments like that.
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It looks to me like a poem. heh. Very deep. You put alot of effort I hope in this peice. It is very umm. Well I found alot of it odd but it was put together well and much better than my dfrops. Love the drop. lol.
Keep dropping. lol RTF wif some battles. In the sig. |
i was feelin every fuckin word...mos def a new OM classic at tha least...guess i got yo name to look out for too...i gives it a 10/10...keep goin dawg...~1~
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and stay out my head...LMAO |
i was really feeling this your vocabulary was very good and stuctured alright coulda been better but damn the flow was pretty damn good..the creativty and metaphores you used were so good and the emotion on this peice was so emotional....made me feel touched;) ...haha jk...but yea man keep doing your thing theres not much i would change if i were you but maybe try working on the stucture but that dont matter really..
good peice..keep doign your thang |
thanks for the feed.
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you are an idiot dawg, i almost fell out of my chair laughing when i read this. the read was good though fidel keep it up. good topical. |
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