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My nines will spray, from far away harmin gays/
I'll bring ya weak spit game to a hault like a rain delay/
Change of pace shots will change ya face/
I got you scared like michael jackson wantin to change ya race/
Think about this if I neva heard of you do you think I would care if I murdered you?/
These Bullets I'm servin you will turn ya dome to a drop top convertable/
I got a beretta that'll I bang to leave you in a box like betta chedders/ (crackers snack food)
And make ya T-shirt wetter than a water fight in rainy weather/
I'll dump on site, hit u ever where except ya wind pipe/
That way you wont need a car to roll around fa tha rest of ya life/ (wheel chair homie)
This bitch should know that I bang out foes wit .44's/
I'll let my gat blow and then niggas will call u "sick wit holes"/
My 3-8 will eliminate any nigga that's wack or fake/
I'll bang a nigga above tha waist and have him on tha ground doin tha harlem shake/
When the beam hits, I'm quick to squeeze clips, so u wanna might ~get~shit~settled/
Cuz I'll put more red dots on ur face than a white~kid~wit~freckles/
U pretend~ur~evil, but lets get real, your less~than~feeble/
Birdwatching in Arizona is the closest u came to a Desert~Eagle/
Ur best~being~peaceful, the rest~is~just~decietful, so go ahead and ~type quickly~/
But u know the only time u shoot guns and act gangsta is playing ~vice city~/


EASTSIDE



Just felt like rippin on some gun shit. Please leave feedback.

good drop....use a different struc overall nice verse like some of those lines
just work on your word usage and makin your lines a little sicker
keep droppin playa

It's dope but your structure can use some work. Also please get rid of the ~~ it makes your spit look sloppy.

look kid you be shitty even if P Diddy let you sign a contract,couldn't find the exact thmes to blow up a microphone you can only throw your butt in chrome and drive home scared

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Lmao what the fuck does that mean son? Shut the fuck up b and stop wastin space. What does "thmes" mean?

AQUICK PUNCHLINE

Look kid you be shitty even if P Diddy let you sign
A contract, couldn't find the exact rhymes that get bells to chime
And blow up a microphone you can only throw your butt in chrome
And drive home scared

It still doesn't make sense dick. I don't even know why you wastin time wit that bum ass shit b.

More feedback please

Lololmao...
MY BOOOOY CURTZ!!!...
Gota Wait For My Man To Get In His Zone, Bouta be Killah...
And "MASTERRAPPA"...
Get Outa Here Cuz Your Garbage And You Fuck With Curtz Thats The BluePrints Drama Aswell...
Real Nice Shit Curtz...
Nice Subtle Wordplay And All That Shit...
Flow And Everything...
For A Keystyle Ya Got This...

uppin

good drop...just needs work on the stretched line...thats the only flaw in it...sum good meta's in there....just dont stretch ya lines cause it messes up the flow....good drop though....

yea nice drop fam..lines stretched but overall it look good

nice drop but your stucture really needs alot of work

but overall good drop

Thanks for the feedback. What did ya'll LIKE about it though? lol

lol.. ill respond to that but can you hit up my open mic ... only live once feat...Limited Edition...its dope as fuk thankz

yo good drop fam.. shitty structure but u made up for it with good rhymes if u keep working u will become pretty good..