[.]Polar Heights[.]
 

:whacky:

Description is my reflection, the image, implicit repellant
to make decisions that were intelligent, unjust incessant
Im the crust that settled, corroding away, mass irrelevance
frozen to stray from secondless time-frames, oblique prey
To reach frames of immaculate conceptions, prevalent rejection
at the bottom of this league of gentlemen, regiment descension
Thats me- questing for a fundamental form of understanding
falling out of love, the blunder central of crash landing
Static panning, until facial muscle spanning resembles anguish
My sole standing, the covetous product of impetuous rambling
And intentional planning of motions mismanaged in heated moments
shrugs and a singlebed is what I recieve as a grieving token
The shrieking is broken by physicality, the uprising of apathy
a tyrant on the brink of sanity, umpiring his own calamity
Tiring of withstanding vanity, common ground bonds- commonplace
Upon her torrent face, was my figure occupying a foreign space
Law and taste's intergrate in my eyes, then exit and break
allowing me to redecorate the sectioned hate, depending on fate
Expending on shape, their way of life, are they willing to fight?
against this villain of strife, will you be here, yonder the night?
The ponder on sight- distracted, infact opinions on first glance
reprimanded as lovelorns first hand expressed what words cant
The term rant, optional, while opticals exchange present antiquity
mans history portraited instantly, with palms resting specifically
Vividly connected as if intended, the touch of magic impended
the happy incentive being my eccentric glow, shown on my offensive
Retentive not being synonymous with my luck, the reality loser
Mr. chastity polluter who's in tune to the infernal racket
Internal habits become external, the shackling, the grand lacking
I can't even outline whats happening, Ivory border- I stand savage
Bland language, not a physical demise, white lights my adulation
female fascination, and admiration in no traces, like my patience
Congratulations was the occupation for all of the X chromosomes
sex was a hopeless tone, is there no escaping this broken home??
NOPE!

Yo this shit was nice. You had a great flow and the vocab is off the meter. It had alot of feelings and descriptions that will puzzle most!!!! I would have to say this is an altogether perfect piece
10/10
~1~

Yeah i agree, this was a nice piece, its flow was really good through out the piece when i was reading it, your vocab was really good, you started and ended this pretty well i thought, every line was real good and flowed nicely, everything was good about this i thought nothing really bad about it, keep dropping.

Thanks For The Feedback People... :D

It Lacked Nipples..

Just Like Ula

fuck seriously like 2 hrs ago, i was dropping a really really long reply to ur shit, then my fuckin computer restarted for no reason, so bear with me and my slack reply

Description is my reflection, the image, implicit repellant
to make decisions that were intelligent, unjust incessant
read this and i was like boom this is the bomb, niceness
strong opener had me curious for the rest

Upon her torrent face, was my figure occupying a foreign space
Law and taste's intergrate in my eyes, then exit and break
liked it how every so lines u broke into wordplay,
orginal flow....and rhyme scheme

Expending on shape, their way of life, are they willing to fight?
against this villain of strife, will you be here, yonder the night?
no & no^^, liked your questions

The ending seemed a lil ruhsed, well maybe cause u intended
this to be only a text piece, cause of that one big verse...

very orignal style, like how u didnt do for that same old
line for line approach 90% of text ppl go for, and ur
steezle was quite the good and orignal, and umm haha
i tried to tell u think on aim like a million times, my rap
voice is similar to urs [well not anymore] so i can muhahahahaahahahaahahahaah manipulate minds by making em think u collabed with me lol j/k............................
your were quite imaginative, and creative,
thank god your shit didnt get repetative,
havent read ur OM shit for like months,
i think the last time was in march when i was mod of this place,
well good luck with what ever goals u got set,
this was like dopernecessity well not to sound like i'm just givin u props for being a mod [u dont do jack crap OM mod work]
well keep dropping more om's cause i really get bored of reading ppl who lack skill............................................. ....

like blaow what up homie, return the favor pl
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=83778

at kids saying 10 out of 10, lmao. .

it wasnt that bad of a piece, abstract as always, strong use of internals and multi's to tie the flow, a couple questions raised that were decent, seemed to start off dope then fizzle out towards the end, kinda rushed actually, but still not bad, good imagination and creativity shown in this though, held my attention nicely and THANK GOD you ditched the "capitalise ever word" steez, it hurts the eyes = )

Props on this one Demik. . :)

N-Demik: i have listened to ur audio alot :) and i have become a fan.....so i check ur shit often

ur vocab is really good..seroiusly i understand alot of songs u write some i dont but mostly there dope..:)

this was good i was feelin it alot..it seems on ur songs u aint afraid to show ur own style which is dope...

Props to ya and keep droppin open mics...


P.S= TALK TO ME ON AIM GOTDAMMIT AIM=ZanySkillz

Oh Shit...That was you...LOL :hairy:

LOL@Cam saying "not bad" as though this piece was more towards the "bad" side of the rating spectrum.. :rolleyes:

Thanks for the feedback though... :D

Cam hates it when someone possibly is better than him.

^^^yeh it was me:o

i felt so rejected...........is that a bad thing like u saying Oh Shit...

Pz.......by the way Third eye is dope...did u make the beat :whacky:








what?

Not Bad

Haha...Just Because Thats Such A Half Arsed Reply..Ima Delete It...

Be More Elaborate Next Time



Naw...I Just Find It Strange When People Message Me From No-Where And I Have No Idea Who They Are... :D

Yoo Didn't Delete It

I Wasn't Talking To You..I Deleted The Herbish Post After Yours