Winter Burns (Funn Is BK...)
 

I gave feed bk in threads;

3 minds combined

Ego trip

This is my life

(intro)
Short summers, an long winters/
COLD war, COLD people, WARM fingers/
Visable breath of silent whispers/
the season of arctic, CHILLS an swelling blisters/


Sitting back, decaying lungs, burning papers in tabaco/
smoke floats with the air flow, rapid memories of agro/
veins POP, like EYES, paleing skin like Jacko/ (MJ)
dark clouds emulate mortal brains, no love for the mistletoe/
broken boiler, cracked windows, the breeze brushes my hair/
chilling spines, SOLID tears, but I don't seem to care/
I refuse to move, I refuse to fear the air/
zombies stare, I remain seated in my creased arm chair/
characters adapt to this cold climate/
"Rain drops falling on my head", from the mouth of 'Issac'/
I look up in search for heaven, an see the Angles plummet/
Fix my mind an start climbing, to reach the mountains summit/
I keep my HEAD up, but my NECK won't hold/
My mind straight like my sexuality, stand STRAIGHT, never fold/
So cold, I place my glacial palms over the burning coal/
Try'na keep my chain of thought, and the weed I just rolled/
coz destitute scavengers want all 4 nothin'/
Like, I made this without help... an everybody wants sum thing'/
I too been BITTEN by FROST and kissed by SLEEP'S cousin/
It's a spiritual WAR, an both sides of my conscience are tuggin'/
I get so HIGH I can see the HILLS in CYPRSS/ (get it)
An when I get to the hill I might just/
jump an won't stop like red lights an hitch hikers/
an if I survive I'll probably meet some flesh eating tigers/
give my ghost up soon as I expiriance the warp of frantic lifers/
So I Rap all day, an still see other forms of biters/

(Outro)
Can I live... despite the cold
Will I live... despite the cold

could I live despite the cold
would I live despite the cold

Uppin...

This was ok, ..u could have use some more vocab in it lol^^
but it flowed well...and was like personal i think when i was readin, ..had some funny aspects in it....and this was a decent drop

And good to see u follow the rules = )

This was ok, ..u could have use some ok vocab in it lol^^
but it flowed well...and was like personal i think when i was readin, ..had some funny aspects in it....and this was a decent drop

And good to see u follow the rules = )

This was ok, ..u used some ok vocab in it lol^^
but it flowed well...and was like personal i think when i was readin, ..had some funny aspects in it....and this was a decent drop

And good to see u follow the rules = )

OK? Dont know what the fuck went wrong with Edicius

I know you can do better then that, but its alright ya know. I felt this more of a creative peice, rather then complex.



This intro is dope, and works well. Althought you started to flow off creativity at the end with:



Dope line, but didnt fit with the peice, so it made it kinda weak.

Overall I rate this - 6/10 (Pretty good)

Oh yea, hit the favour on mine aight:

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=88508

most appreciated and keep dropping open mics

It's true this drop does reflect the life of mine an I was thinkin' bout what I wanted to say rather than how lyical I wanted to be...I'll make up for it when I can coz that peice was done in my collage lunch time so bout the last 1/4 of it was rushed... still uppin this!!!

I'ma do sumting I don't usually do... I'm jus in that kinda mood, tell me what'cah think of dis... plz don't sleep... ps feed bk on 'Winter burns' would be madly appriciated!!!

You need this FIX like crack heads,
they open off the shit I be sellin' em'/
Fuck dying, I plan to live till the next millenium/
ROLLING OUT, with more JOINTS than a skeleton/
nigga, I'm Ill, overdosed verbal medicine/
ROCKING GALS, I get more BRAIN than INTELLIGENCE/
You can't relate, you get PLAYED like IVERY on ELEPHANTS/
all my life is bout, is hiding evidence/
which links me 2 fruard benifits/
My essence lacks elegence/ absence sence/
which should be COMMON, don't test my arrogence/
or you won't even live 2 see the consequence/
you'll be around longer with.............................................. ..........

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PATIENCE/...............................................

uppin dis despite the lack of effort, I'm uppin 4 feed bk on Winterburns, I jus droppped this as a sorry excuse to post...

This Was Creative.. The Flow Was On Point.
I Was Feeling The Hook. You Could Have Got More
In Depth With It And All.. But Overall Nice Piece

Please Hit Mine Up In Return
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...?threadid=89500

Thanx... Uppin