Im tryin to elevate
 

let me no what you think.
give me some pointers on how to do better.

ya fuckas betta back-out cause i got that 42 on me like Jerry Stackhouse/
lil niggas get used more than pipes in a crackhouse/
no lights up stairs givin nigga mental black-outz/

yall can't stand me... yall just bitchin like Eli Manning/
my boyk.hitch will pull-out N get ya voice squeaky like the Nanny's/

theres no fuckin reason...im so concited, betta start heatin/
hittin ya wit punches like Roy Jones...now ya face starts bleedin/

damn yall lost life...i toss rights...fightin all night/
u wit the Head of authoritys always on they Boss pipe/

listen dawg im startin runnin N gunnin/
me flopin is like Michael Jackson sleepin wit a woman/

no hugs..pop slugs, Rich.P is cuttin up ya throat mane/
we so dope......they should call us cocaine/

gimme feedback

can anybody can anybody help me out here.

Well...overall it wasn't that great of a drop..but it has potential.

Some lines were funny...(The Michael Jackson line)..others had good flow (The multis at the beginning)

All I can say is keep elevating and keep writing.

Peace

tnanx.
keep em comin.