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HATE IT OR LOVE IT (doin my thang)
verse 1: like slim shady im runnin round wit yo grandmothers corpse... feedin it to ya dog so on Sunday i'll crucify em right on yo front porch... i guess im a lil sick, cuz my girl barfed on my dick... and tha next thing you know im in her clit, not givin a shit... playin ass grab wit da bitches while i still hit switches... board so i dig ditches so i can purposily get some stiches... lookin back on my life, on all of my experiences... still not givin a fuck like "bad-meets-evil" on they everlastin drug tripses... tipsy like j-kwon but i never "hood hop" like him... im still in tha D like tha pistons and im real and raw like dem... creatin hazzards for these cowards in tha rap world... movin from "tha basement" to some "style" like im in big tiggers world... different like diddy runnin marathons, my life camera is on... slittin throats, no chokes, just death and im gone... muthafuckas betta understand what dis kid is about... and you dont like? BITE MY DICK, nigga sue my mouth (haha)... hook: hate it or love it tha teenagers comin up... and yall cant stop us so yall can lick our nuts... we comin through on some straight G shit... so lets do dis, cmon lets get rich... ..::repeat 2x::.. when i think of somethin else i'll jot it down...if anybody wanna be on dis i can open another thread and we can collab just get at me...only if yall wanna...but anyway, leave a nigga some fuckin PROPER FEEDBACK on dis yall...dis my first OM in a while...get at tha kid!!! |
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ummmmmm.........you need to werk on your structer..............
the vocab wasnt that good.........rhyme scheme was simple...........but it was fucked up by the structer........the content was kinda wack.....cuz its like a generic topic......but dont make your letters that big cuz it makes the structer worse.......... two words for ya........................elevate dog............... |
vocab was off, seemed to push a lil hard to get a ryhming word, a lil simple good read though no hate keep practicing work on elevation...peace
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thanx yall...a nigga really appreciate da feedz...4real
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yo...u ripped off The Game and 50 Cent wit da title "Hate it or Love it" check da cd case of The Game's new cd "The Documentary" if u don't beleive me and u ripped alot off of Eminem's "Role Model" off of his Slim Shady LP and u heard what da others had ta say no hate but 2.5 outta 5.0 like i had to get told a few times "ELEVATE" keep practicing
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i think he knows that...stupid ass...i mean honestly u think he jus randomly did it...its a knock of it son...dont hate it
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thanx for tha backup my nigga...i really did know what i was doin...da verse is writtin in slim shady style...and tha chorus (and beat) is from 50 and game...damn...but anyway...more feed please... :thumbup: |
ne time cuz...but yea bout da verse...
it wasnt like the worst eva...it jus seemed a lil forced...like u was havin trouble comin wit rhymes so u was jus puttin stuff togetha |
^^^i know...i was bored and whateva came to my head, i typed it...its funny though...WHENEVA I OM SUMTHIN DATS GOOD, I GETS NO FEED (complex 16's part two=example) BUT WHEN I PUT SUMTHIN DAT I KNOW IS SHITTY, I GETS ALL THA FEEDZ...DIS IS FUCKIN BULLSHIT!!!!!!!!
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no fuckin' shit u think i didn't know that i was just sayin that because there is also a thing called "BITING" and u know what the fuck i'm talkin about it's not like u people don't put stupid ass shit out urselves |
dont feepost dawg...we know what u talkin bout...i knew what i was doin homie...~1~
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ur a fuckin dumbass he didn't bite unless he took the EXACT line from eminem or game or 50......an he ain't steal shit from Game cuz i had his CD a week b4 it came out......plus i known about him 4 like 2 yearz kid......so i think i would kno anyway kinda basic an forced.....it needz a little structure work an flow wuz KINDA off but it wuz okay nuthin special tho no hate nah mean i'd give it a umm...... 6.5/10 maybe? but stay up dog an don't let no one keep u down nah mean :thumbup: |
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