we all die one day
 

if there was a god what would he look like//
would he really make this fucked-up world tight?//
if there wasn't war,if there weren't fights//
would life really be better,if peeps had no cheddar//(money)
no more peeps tryin to make more cash than a gay wear's leather//
no more pain,blood and tears and no more racehate//
no more fucked-up kids killin their own classmates//
no more little cute gils gettin beat up and raped//
but people keep buyin guns and bush keeps droppin bombs//
I ain't got shit to say, but we all die one day...one day//
we all die one day...each in another way...one day//
will we really die younger if we don't pray?//
the cristians pray to God and the moslims to allah//
but I don't believe in any god since i was a crawlah//(baby)
you know why? no? well I'm n ot gonna lie//
I don't believe cuz one day...we all die!!!

aight just a quick spit,tellin it like it is...

DECENT AND VERY POETIC WORK HARD YOU GOT A GOOD CONCIOUS

^thanx dawg

don't sleep on this y'all...

yeah that was some good poetic type shit dawg keep postin and i look forward to readin yo shit

^^straight wordness to all these cats....i was feelin a poetic vibe when i read that, thats not necessarily a bad thing though. ur vocab and wordplay were ok, and next time ima say try a pick a better topic to write about, but its all good, keep droppin homie, u got potential......

peace......

aight thanx

zzzzzzzzzzzzz

wtf...y'all sleepin or sumthing?damn

I got BANNED but I'm back!(I'm maxximum)
so...uppin

it was good for an open mic... you could elevate a lil...
Ima get you into the Omens and you can do some collabs
with the crew and elevate... I'm gonna put a deadline on ya
though... I want to see some improvement in your spits
within 2 weeks... I'll be peepin your shit... MAKE SURE YOU
STAY ACTIVE... IF I SENSE INACTIVITY... I'LL HAVE YOU CUT.
strap on a sig... AND WELCOME TO THE FAM.
~Ashy~ & THE OMENS

thanx