(Contendorship Match) Lay Fear ( 6 ) vs LPMNDCTE ( 3 )
 

*CONTENDORSHIP MATCH*

-Winners of the contendorship matches will be in the HW match next week.

Due times:
Check in due Wednesday 11.59pm EST.
- if you don't check in by this time, and you DO end up posting, -2 votes.
Verses due by Friday 11.59pm EST. Yeah, that's eastern. not pacific.
Lateness = -2 votes even IF your opponent allows you to post late.
Max. extension = 24 hours, to be granted by your opponent.

Line limits:
10 min and 20 max. for regular battles. 16 min and no max in champ matches. If no line limit agreed, second battler to post must match first battler. But ultimately, first battler gets to set the line number by how much he posts.

Goodluck.

Hows 14 sound?..

Sounds cool to me.... Depending on how much stuff I need to do this week, I'll problably be posting Friday, so hold your verse til then...

Alrigh thats cool, well I'll have 14, so if I need to scrap some an post less that'll be fine.

ur ugly dude, no way you get sex...in the bedroom, ur rated the worst
for a girl to Lay Fear, she'd have to throw a pillow over his head 1st
u put blood & sweat into the mag, & rated urself high..its lame dude
^^^ thats such a Crhyme I thought we were in the same crew
& you'll refuse that statement, but come on dude, u know I'm right
the last time you got through a round, u staggered to stand upright
no need to keep glorifying ur own efforts.. so please stop.. fag
even if u lose this week, u'll still power rank urself in the mag
cuz your a fake and you know it...I'll say this before you drop kid
that last time you cuz with proof...ur breath smelled toxic
& 14 is what you crave for...then then u'll get bounced on hard
cuz the last time seen over 18, you viewed other peoples id cards
n I aint fn ya girl again...a ready torn that pus and wrecked it
cuz she got more time for me...but I'm like na-no seconds

I'll try an have my verse up tonight,..if I do I'll just edit it into this post. pz

You can't even pronounce ya name..wtf

Let me clear this up..
Faggot ain't shit, ya like dick. As for ya name? ya might wanna spruce it up.
I DO get ya name tho..its just a list of first initials of all the dudes u've fucked.
Your crew ain't convicts, your queers. You should be scared to show face.
If it is a Chryme Sindicate..its only cuz gay marriages ARE illegal in most states.
His corny verse should be smashed n then flipped, he's always actin like this.
N with all the played concepts he hasbro , he's even got them askin for tips.
I can see the symptoms,..but dope? na I'll have to admit.
Cuz when we read ya verse all we seizure, fuckin punches spasim an miss.
You were brought up to be gay, but even the endings been dealt with.
An as for forefathers - he's just always had three more dads than everyone else did.
Fuck what the facts say, I'll crush you. I doubt your slicker, see.
Cuz this is the first time I've been handed an L,..an actually came out with a victory.
Beat him once in the the tourney. Whatever movie makes he'll get hurt son.
N we'll all see that this isn't a Lay vs LP sequel..its jus a re-make of the first one.

[ur ugly dude, no way you get sex...in the bedroom, ur rated the worst
for a girl to Lay Fear, she'd have to throw a pillow over his head 1st
^Alright.

u put blood & sweat into the mag, & rated urself high..its lame dude
^^^ thats such a Crhyme I thought we were in the same crew
^Nah. Kinda lame.

& you'll refuse that statement, but come on dude, u know I'm right
the last time you got through a round, u staggered to stand upright
^No, dude.

no need to keep glorifying ur own efforts.. so please stop.. fag
even if u lose this week, u'll still power rank urself in the mag
^No.

cuz your a fake and you know it...I'll say this before you drop kid
that last time you cuz with proof...ur breath smelled toxic
^Naaah.

& 14 is what you crave for...then then u'll get bounced on hard
cuz the last time seen over 18, you viewed other peoples id cards
^Nah, man.

n I aint fn ya girl again...a ready torn that pus and wrecked it
cuz she got more time for me...but I'm like na-no seconds
^Alright.

Lp, you need to work on creating wittier and harder hitting, humorous punches. Alot of your punches were barely insulting him, and if you change you wording a bit it might help them connect. But, for the most part you just need to come up with some new concepts. You had one or two alright lines though. Maybe spend some more time writing your verse. Might help.

PS- Lmao, I just read through what I wrote about your punches and your verse. I'm not trying to come off as a dick or anything, I'm just kinda rough on some verses. Just trying to give you some constructive criticism to help elevate. So don't take any offense to it.


Faggot ain't shit, ya like dick. As for ya name? ya might wanna spruce it up.
I DO get ya name tho..its just a list of first initials of all the dudes u've fucked.
^Alright.

Your crew ain't convicts, your queers. You should be scared to show face.
If it is a Chryme Sindicate..its only cuz gay marriages ARE illegal in most states.
^Haha. Alright.

His corny verse should be smashed n then flipped, he's always actin like this.
N with all the played concepts he hasbro , he's even got them askin for tips.
^Haha. I liked that one.

I can see the symptoms,..but dope? na I'll have to admit.
Cuz when we read ya verse all we seizure, your fuckin punches spasim an miss.
^I think you added an extra word to this one.

You were brought up to be gay, but even the endings been dealt with.
An as for forefathers - he's just always had three more dads than everyone else did.
^Alright.

Fuck what the facts say, I'll crush you. I doubt your slicker, see.
Cuz this is the first time I've been handed an L,..an actually came out with a victory.
^Haha. Pretty good concept even though "L is played."

Beat him once in the the tourney. Whatever movie makes he'll get hurt son.
N we'll all see that this isn't a Lay vs LP sequel..its jus a re-make of the first one.
^Haha. Pretty good.

I see your goin' for the humor this time around. That is what wins battles though. You came real consistent this week. Most of your punches connected. Also good to see a new flip on old concepts, aswell as fresh concepts. Good shit, bro.

no need to keep glorifying ur own efforts.. so please stop.. fag
even if u lose this week, u'll still power rank urself in the mag

vs

Your crew ain't convicts, your queers. You should be scared to show face.
If it is a Chryme Sindicate..its only cuz gay marriages ARE illegal in most states.
I can see the symptoms,..but dope? na I'll have to admit.
Cuz when we read ya verse all we seizure, fuckin punches spasim an miss.
Fuck what the facts say, I'll crush you. I doubt your slicker, see.
Cuz this is the first time I've been handed an L,..an actually came out with a victory.
Beat him once in the the tourney. Whatever movie makes he'll get hurt son.
N we'll all see that this isn't a Lay vs LP sequel..its jus a re-make of the first one.
DOPE CLOSER

VOTE LAY...LPMDCTASDFASDF WAS TOO BASIC, NOTHING REALLY STOOD OUT, IT WASNT BAD AT ALL...BUT NOTHING SEEMED OG OR FRESH