Robert De Niro vs Yvonne
 

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PM'd me for a battle?...ok bruh
You aint gatta reciet a story..peeps aint got time so it goes like this

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Yvonne has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-18-05 08:48 AM.

Robert De Niro has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-18-05 08:58 AM.

Yvonne's at a fork in the road, which way will she choose?
i'd say she'd go right........but she went left just to loose
i guess you would get a vote.....if the system ever won
but it's wins stuck at 0 sort of like elevationg from Yvonne(Y-Von)
she's from her crib, is that next to a bench and her guitar
i mean come on, your verse described just how whack you are
your tung tied, with no spits, i guess she chocked and froze
sorry to break the news..but it's the opposite of dope you compose

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lol word mayne....vote peeps...vote vote vote...................

Voted For: Yvonne

Yvonne's at a fork in the road, which way will she choose?
i'd say she'd go right........but she went left just to loose
^^just to loose?..i think you mean lose..n this choppy rhymin here...2/10
i guess you would get a vote.....if the system ever won
but it's wins stuck at 0 sort of like elevationg from Yvonne(Y-Von)
^^Nameplay was ite..but in the set-up...system lines are played as fuck...4/10
she's from her crib, is that next to a bench and her guitar
i mean come on, your verse described just how whack you are
^^^set-it up ite...but punch sucked...3/10
your tung tied, with no spits, i guess she chocked and froze
sorry to break the news..but it's the opposite of dope you compose
^^Basic...2/10

Ite...this was a so-so verse.Had some choopy rhyming in the 1st bar.Basic rhyme scheme.Some lines like the 2nd bar..you had an ite punch..but set-up was bad.GEt more creative...Sytem lines have been done a million times before.So work on rhymin,set-ups,n creativity.

u wudnt be hotter dan a hoe cake even if u were from d oven
bitch,if u dot wanna Tripple like N count ur steps b4 u stolen
^^Poor rhyming..oven/stolen?..no...4/10
my punches make a hole between ur legs to make ut tigh dangle
watch him moan like triny when i knock him off 2 d state of mental
^^moan like triny?..do u mean trini?I'm from trinidad?..what's dat mean?..n in set-up..ut??..spell check your verses next time....3/10
babies break thru ya ego and make u re-arrange yr shit
its sad u think to be a hero when u just a genuine bitch
^^too basic...4/10
listen,even if you called urself god u still wunt get respect
cos nobody herre 2 act dramas,its all about lyrical effect
^^1st line is played as fuck..2nd was too basic..3/10

OK..Like Robert..you had an opener with choppy rhyming.That 2nd bar just seemed to make no sense.May e you had sumtin...but the spelling really messed it up.And once again..like Robert...you were basic n had played lines..like that God one.So work on the same thing that I told Robert to work on :thumbup:

WEAK BATTLE

Vote-Ynovne

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wow he's dumb.............................................. .

uppin this muther fucker mayne...

Voted For: Yvonne

This was a good battle but mah girl Yvonne took this one real ez Robert De Niro verse was shitty n didnt make sense Yvonne's at a fork in the road, which way will she choose?
i'd say she'd go right........but she went left just to loose
^^that was jus wack it didnt have a punch or nothin it was jus plain old stupid
thats not the only line in Robert verse dat sucked Yvonne punches were hard hittin and her verse was kinda funny thats y mah vote goes to her

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shitty? lmao okay you little herb...haha yall just mad cus i dropped out of trigga town haha fuck with you i knew you wasn't cool...look out for them audio track from the one and only CS