Donate rhymes and associate with minds in the rap zone
Donate rhymes and associate with minds in the rap zone
Write mellow script that bring about fellowship and scrap domes Leaving a yellow strip on microphone that even Ajax won’t remove Write clean lines with a tight keen mind sometimes I couldn’t Grow and wouldn’t flow like this, it’s a gift there shouldn’t Be any crime parts in fine arts so when my nine sparks Violence stir and then silence occur my pistol grips has divine marks In the form of finger prints linger and spent time trying To wipe them off, legal fun quotes shouldn’t equal dying In gun smoke like a trooper in starched pants will march and advance On targets in markets of symphony, pockets are empty a chance To get paid, invincible and cool like a principal in school try Educate cats and devastate with stats dedicate my hats to the sky Fly in classrooms as my task blooms urging students to take Complex looks at textbooks some vexed and shook on the title Need fast logic as students are a class of objects that are vital And subject to failure the public will jail ya for that suicidal Is making the list this year also can fall low to criticism societal Battle of words which rattle herds of teachers and it can feature Salary cuts some have allergy but still included like preachers |
It's good to see that some newbs have talent, this was nice started slowly
but it ended well. Nice use of vocab but it can be up-ed ! same with complexity. U seem to say to much when u dont, really have to if u know what I mean.. I liked this bar,.. Be any crime parts in fine arts so when my nine sparks Violence stir and then silence occur my pistol grips has divine marks ^^dope^^ need to step your game up with your topicals but I'm sure u will get there shortly, keep writing and stay active is the only advice I will give you & read other Open mics and topical battles. |
tornado and xplict are some good nu-bs and if they keep it up they'll go far in the game.
this was good. better then that last drop. but u can do pretty good storys, here u just spittin. try tellin us a lil bit bout ur life. problems loves. etc. like i sometimes do.. it may catch the readers attention. try checkin out my piece " a body with no soul" ull see wut i mean |
I Like This One Nice Use Of Multis Keeping The Flow Interesting Sounds Like It Will Flow Real Nice With A Beat, The Thing I Love Is Almost None Of The Multis Were Forced. These Days People Try To Do Alot Of Multis And Force Them Like Crazy, You Did It Naturally And It All Goese Well Together
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