Charlie Brown (FREESTYLE)<sick
 

I breaks It down like a bone fracture
this terroristic hard form to capture
i dispose a rhyme, to fucken expose ya mind
flowz I'm, I'll leave any hot niggaz froze in time
shine like the sun after rain, trash ya game im way pass the plain
give ya a tower in eyeful(eiffel)of skill so u can check what i pull
i don't buy your shit even if its holy why would i buy bull(bible)
boa constricting as i grab hold, like the nile flooded i got mad flow
drown in this deep water,u couldnt follow me being a my shadow
the speech i speak slaughters,i strike foes and never miss
no nigga could better this the cleaverness i be on that philly blaze
gets me realy dazed cant catch this over ya head being willy mays
create a feet, submarine sinkin i get so deep, i'll whoop yall
fucken asses, I never took falls,with this verbal coffin i'll put yall
u niggas shoot ya gunz like charlie brown kicken a foot ball

uppin THIS FOR FEED BACK ..............................

yea duke diz was good but u need 2 line up ya lines 4 tha next time so it'll b all 2getha ...but ur multies & vocab was nice i like it keep elevating fa sho

This was good man, not bad at all. Im liking ur vocab and everything. The rhyming was cool too. But like the dude said u should work on ur structure so the reader will be able to flow thru it easier.