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Journal!st 08-21-06 02:15 AM

Vail of Dreams
 
"Thread softly, as you thread on my dreams"
Quite steps are taken, with pleasure
i measure....from meters to inches.
my stomach twists and turns, with pain
i feel plain..as i wake to such a rush.
gordion knots made, never to be untied
i have died, the tears hug my cheek with stitches.
clasped in a endless ritual, of transparent lies
Another..an extra if taken, then these dreams are crushed.

"Hold tight my dreams, as you hold them closely"
Hands grab a hold of pureness
something so defined, as told my dreams fascinate
Eye's fluster from the utter pain
i explain...the agony of ones pressured burden to carry
word's tattoo'd onto my own tongue
still young...the bullrush onto your emotions and deteriate
Grasp it em, grasp them ever so tightly
i whisper lightly...you hold the excrusciating pain, sadly.
you thread so vile, you tread so innocent
your words more transparent, emotions run wild and beligerent.



The sweet serenity of your dying presence
caresses my heart with pouring love that tickles my emotions
"she loves me, She loves me not"
the feelings she fills me up right with knots and butterflies that roam
how kind she is to me like the sun to a tree
letting thou roots grow shamessly with intentions to barefruits and shade
That was the past, AIR is our own future
not wanting near of you anymore, i rest in silence for another

"Dreams are more real than a knife slitting a wrist"
Teeter, totter my emotions bleed.
i bleed, non -stop strapped to the devils creed.

Journal!st 08-21-06 02:22 AM

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I Am Unreal. 08-24-06 12:07 AM

Nice man I liked this. Good read and I felt the emotion too.

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how kind she is to me like the sun to a tree
letting thou roots grow shamessly with intentions to barefruits and shade
That was the past, AIR is our own future
not wanting near of you anymore, i rest in silence for another

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noice!

Journal!st 08-24-06 04:14 AM

thank you now i want myself in here to feed cus i love his opinions aswell as your though aswell mayne!...thanks will leave feed!.

Young Fear 10-17-06 05:12 PM

nice peace. I liked the the use of vocab and wordplay

Valerie 10-17-06 06:36 PM

Damn, I liked this one man!! nice vocab flow to it and everything i mean WOW man u put effort in this. :thumbup:


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