check this
i used this in a battle and ive been told its wank so how can i elavate on my shit
i tried to read ya mind but the page was blank// like def jam u in a vendetta// dinai im gonna deny u victory// the rhymes i spit are lines i rip// spit venom in every direction soak sum up// fucked ya bitch cos she sez ya cant get it up// like vanilla ice u shud give this game up// i can cut ya feet off which makes it easier to d-feet u// i deflect the best like bullets off my vest// and lets be honest u cant beat me im simply the best// |
needs much work
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structure is a huge problem. make sure ur lines are in sets and of equal length. read it to yourself so u know it makes sense.
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the fact that u ganked Xzibits line from 8 mile doesnt help, (spit veonom soak sum up)
u gotta also make sure it ryhmes man peace it all together and make sure it flows as u read it |
^^U Need 2 Lengthen Ur Lines And Make Sure They Make Sense And Flow Good...Punches Need 2 Be Harder...
I Could Go On But I Think U Shud Read Xpoz'D's 101 Battling Guide...Has It All There...It Helps Alot... |
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