Cerulean vs A.M.O.K
 

Battle Rules:

10-12 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting
No Dickriding
No Racism (I'm sick of cats knockin on me just cos I'm German)

I'll set it off...

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 08-01-04 at 07:35 AM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.

Cerulean has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-29-04 07:36 AM.

Kid's goin AMOK battlin me, went hyper and shat his diaper
A lyrical case of A.D.D., control yaself and u might flow tighter
Judging by ya name I bet you go wildin out straight crazy
But even if ya words were charged ya'd still not ever "faze" me
Responding to my challenge u treadin a really thin line AMOK
Ya ego vs. my brains is balancin an elefant on a hammock
Spendin hours thinkin up watery lines prolly gives this dude a kick
My own style comes naturally, its findin empty threads thats tha trick
Think you spit sick? Wait till I've awoken my sleeping demon
I would "punch" you physically but ya bowel's too full o semen
Ya think your styles insane but "illness" is somethin ya never endured
So Imma striaght rack ya mindgrain till I got this case of "AMOK" cured

A.M.O.K has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-29-04 05:32 PM.

Just got on, is time already up??ha

I'll key something

I expose foes & throw em in a aybss of blackness
How funny, found your Family Tree is the Root to wackness,
A win?Can't hav this, chances are slimmer then paper
& against me, you'll never see it like a German rapper,
I'll smack ya, till your innards split & you piss yourself
& your gay, hang off boys ass more then pants w/ no belt,
If skills were wealth, then your rhymes homeless clearly
So poor infact it seeks assitance from the Salivation Army,
Blah that was wack, never thought I'd stoop so low
Go on Suvivor though.... on here?you'll see no vote,

Sleep

IP: AC52 6776


Just got on, is time already up??ha

I'll key something

I expose foes & throw em in a aybss of blackness
How funny, found your Family Tree is the Root to wackness,
A win?Can't hav this, chances are slimmer then paper
& against me, you'll never see it like a German rapper,
I'll smack ya, till your innards split & you piss yourself
& your gay, hang off boys ass more then pants w/ no belt,
If skills were wealth, then your rhymes homeless clearly
So poor infact it seeks assitance from the Salivation Army,
Blah that was wack, never thought I'd stoop so low
Go on Suvivor though.... on here?you'll see no vote,

Sleep

Hurry up & vote, I know ya'll reading our verses

SO VOTE MAHFUCKAS!!

Voted For: Cerulean

Amok- Structure was Good, Flow Was Ok, Punches Were Ok...

Cerulean- Some Lines Were Good Some Not, Like The Elephant Line... Wordplay Was Ok.. Structure was Ok.. And Personals Were Ok

Punches- Amok
Personals- Cerulean
Flow- Amok
Wordplay- Cerulean
Metaphors- Cerulean
Structure- Amok
Originality- Cerulean
Multis- Niether

Final Vote---- Cerulean
Peep Sigg And Return Favor With Honest Vote

Ugh, uppeth

Surely this kids vote is D'Qd?

Uppeth & vote, I'll pay you

Alot of viewing, no voting;one of you break the cycle

This was feedback posted for Cerulean
 

Cerulean, you kept trying to come with personals..but never connected, some okay punches..ok structure, ok flow...nothing to brag about, but an alright verse

Jump at any chance to vote,

Go on, you know you want to!

uppin for more votes.... i always return the favour

uppin 2...

Rise

Voted For: Cerulean



I expose foes & throw em in a aybss of blackness
How funny, found your Family Tree is the Root to wackness,
6/10
A win?Can't hav this, chances are slimmer then paper
& against me, you'll never see it like a German rapper,
6/10
I'll smack ya, till your innards split & you piss yourself
& your gay, hang off boys ass more then pants w/ no belt,
6/10
If skills were wealth, then your rhymes homeless clearly
So poor infact it seeks assitance from the Salivation Army,
6/10
Blah that was wack, never thought I'd stoop so low
Go on Suvivor though.... on here?you'll see no vote,
5/10

Kid's goin AMOK battlin me, went hyper and shat his diaper
A lyrical case of A.D.D., control yaself and u might flow tighter
6/10
Judging by ya name I bet you go wildin out straight crazy
But even if ya words were charged ya'd still not ever "faze" me
6/10
Responding to my challenge u treadin a really thin line AMOK
Ya ego vs. my brains is balancin an elefant on a hammock
7/10
Spendin hours thinkin up watery lines prolly gives this dude a kick
My own style comes naturally, its findin empty threads thats tha trick
6/10
Think you spit sick? Wait till I've awoken my sleeping demon
I would "punch" you physically but ya bowel's too full o semen
8/10
Ya think your styles insane but "illness" is somethin ya never endured
So Imma striaght rack ya mindgrain till I got this case of "AMOK" cured
7/10

this came down 2 harder punches and better wordplay and complexity and vocab

thanks man, now that's what i call a real vote!

MORE VOTES PLEASE

Voted For: Cerulean

Cerulean
structure is good...flow is on target...u had a few multis...wordplay is tight...most of ur punches connected...personals were good...

A.M.O.K
structure is good...flow is also on target...nice multis...wordplay was ok, some of it i didnt like though...some of ur punches connected...no good personals...

Overall
A.M.O.K had more multis...both had a good structure...both had stable flow...Cerulean had better wordplay...as well as more connecting punches...and better personals...so basing off of that...Cerulean gets my vote...

VOTE - CERULEAN

uppin for more votes please!

uppin 2...

Voted For: Cerulean

i liked your style and all around flow...amok needs to elevate to get onto cerulean's level...cerulean came out wit the flow from intro to out and made my jaw drop in every line...good battle, keep praticin

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Rise

Voted For: A.M.O.K

i give it to this guy because he had more rhymes and better flow and it sounded better easyer to understand what he was talkina bout holla

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hm... more votes please! ^^^^^^^^^^^^

Voted For: Cerulean

ok u got him....... neither of yall were great, but i like Cerulean usin his name and his lil story up in it........ and 4 AMOK's lines didnt really rhyme, so thats y i didnt give u the vote.........but no hatin on yall....... ohh yea, and he sed no racist lines and u used one AMOK....... w/e its coool....... and spread the love to my battle: http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ht=FuxJustAWord