The Tables Turned
THE TABLES TURNED . THE REASON My mind had an advantage on my actions, total domination Couldn’t eat, my stomach was rumbling, just for a ration Eyes dried, no tears coming down my sullen cheeks No saliva in my mouth, lips dried, I couldn’t even speak Blasting sounds in my ear drums turned me deaf I’m blinded and muted should I just wait for death No I can’t let this go this way, I must take control Or just suffer my mind’s actions and his deadly soul . . . THE TABLES TURNED I battled a bloody fight inside my brain, head turned to a fierce war No bullets no guns used, just straight words in my mentality’s core Trying to stop my mind’s sins, have to recover my mind set But to get, what I want I have to let go, just brainwashed and forget? There must be another way so my right arm started to move, hand gripped Reached for a clip and inserted into the gun, blasted and my mind flipped My fingers slipped the gun and I can’t reach it, I’m almost done wit this That when my mind got pissed and shot a violent shot but missed Hopefully it did because I need to reverse this situation I’m facing Heated and strapped a plastic explosive to the nerve tissue blazing The scene racing, when will I take control? I need to wait until it’s weak Blasted another explosive, and it got shook, the blood in my brain leaked . . . THE CONCLUSION I finally got the tables turned into my side and now it’s all in the head The only way to get the tables turned is to risk my life and now I’m dead . |
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LoL ATCHA Conclusion!Yo man Nice Shyt Famz!ONCE AGAIN a Dope Piece!Vocab Was RIGHT THERE ON POINT!Wordplay was Good!Structure Was Good!Rhymin Was NICE!Stayin on topic Was on Point!like i said another dope PIECE!overall 8/10! RTF in my Collab with STANZA!Holla Atcha Famz!
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yea thnx for the feed man ill feed on ye verse asap ok thnx
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uppin for more feed cmon pplz stop sleepin need feed
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again ill u have done is said how muched my verse sucks while otha had enjoyed it and want to see me drop more if i see one more like this
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upppin for more feed plz thnx in advance
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this shit was aight like that otha nigga said u coulda put some time into it...seem like u rushed it a lil
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Liked reading this piece, least I can say is you sure approached it in a creative way :thumbup:
Vocab was right on point, sometimes big vocab can ruin a piece but yours was suited for it, it only affected the content in a positive way. Emotion was very strong and raw, had some excellent imagery in there and the ending was very nice with a surprise effect. Keep it up man, I like reading your stuff! |
thnx u very much ill rtf asap
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ok lets get sum more feedback aight cmon uppin ...
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