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Sixth Sense 06-09-05 06:42 PM

The Tables Turned
 
THE TABLES TURNED


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THE REASON
My mind had an advantage on my actions, total domination
Couldn’t eat, my stomach was rumbling, just for a ration
Eyes dried, no tears coming down my sullen cheeks
No saliva in my mouth, lips dried, I couldn’t even speak
Blasting sounds in my ear drums turned me deaf
I’m blinded and muted should I just wait for death
No I can’t let this go this way, I must take control
Or just suffer my mind’s actions and his deadly soul
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THE TABLES TURNED
I battled a bloody fight inside my brain, head turned to a fierce war
No bullets no guns used, just straight words in my mentality’s core
Trying to stop my mind’s sins, have to recover my mind set
But to get, what I want I have to let go, just brainwashed and forget?
There must be another way so my right arm started to move, hand gripped
Reached for a clip and inserted into the gun, blasted and my mind flipped
My fingers slipped the gun and I can’t reach it, I’m almost done wit this
That when my mind got pissed and shot a violent shot but missed
Hopefully it did because I need to reverse this situation I’m facing
Heated and strapped a plastic explosive to the nerve tissue blazing
The scene racing, when will I take control? I need to wait until it’s weak
Blasted another explosive, and it got shook, the blood in my brain leaked
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THE CONCLUSION
I finally got the tables turned into my side and now it’s all in the head
The only way to get the tables turned is to risk my life and now I’m dead
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Sixth Sense 06-09-05 06:43 PM

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http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=193994
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=194486

Ghost 06-09-05 06:48 PM

LoL ATCHA Conclusion!Yo man Nice Shyt Famz!ONCE AGAIN a Dope Piece!Vocab Was RIGHT THERE ON POINT!Wordplay was Good!Structure Was Good!Rhymin Was NICE!Stayin on topic Was on Point!like i said another dope PIECE!overall 8/10! RTF in my Collab with STANZA!Holla Atcha Famz!

Sixth Sense 06-10-05 08:09 AM

yea thnx for the feed man ill feed on ye verse asap ok thnx

uppin for more feed

Sixth Sense 06-10-05 10:57 PM

uppin for more feed cmon pplz stop sleepin need feed

Sixth Sense 06-11-05 05:31 PM

upppin this lets get some feed

Sixth Sense 06-12-05 12:42 AM

again ill u have done is said how muched my verse sucks while otha had enjoyed it and want to see me drop more if i see one more like this





i must report

Sixth Sense 06-12-05 10:35 AM

upppin for more feed plz thnx in advance

Sixth Sense 06-12-05 07:37 PM

cmon pplz lets get some more feedback aight yall

§ick§eed 06-12-05 08:10 PM

this shit was aight like that otha nigga said u coulda put some time into it...seem like u rushed it a lil

DQ 06-13-05 07:20 AM

Liked reading this piece, least I can say is you sure approached it in a creative way :thumbup:
Vocab was right on point, sometimes big vocab can ruin a piece but yours was suited for it, it only affected the content in a positive way. Emotion was very strong and raw, had some excellent imagery in there and the ending was very nice with a surprise effect.

Keep it up man, I like reading your stuff!

Sixth Sense 06-13-05 09:27 AM

thnx u very much ill rtf asap
upppin this for more feed thnx

Sixth Sense 06-14-05 12:21 PM

cmon peeps check this out and leave feed o it aight

Sixth Sense 06-15-05 10:25 AM

ok lets get sum more feedback aight cmon uppin ...


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