Pain in a Verse
 

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=219324
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=228578

verse to a colab i did with my boy on a different site......check.

My pain isn’t somethin’ I boast to most, I suppose what’s wrote’ll be dope when it’s flowed//~/
Know I’m deep when I rhyme, my pain’ll leak in ya mind when I’m speakin’ this time//~/
The truth is steep an’ inclined, ‘cause it’s fuk SkYLL unless he gotta deal an’ he signed//~/
an’ I know you feelin’ these lines, that’s why SkYLL is ill ‘cause he’s real when he rhymes//~/
when I’m writin’ I’m focused, I spit what’s on my mind, don’t care if you like it, I flow it//~/
combined wit the dopest, none of you care about how I feel inside an’ you know it//~/
my life's a game none of you would pull out the cupboard to play//~/
seems like the good an’ evil in me are lovers in ways, remember what I cover today//~/
lyrically, I’m so dope that I’m cocky, but I use negativity, I use it intensely//~/
have you drew what I’m sensing? I would never connect to emcees personally//~/
because they’ll use it against me, conform to writin’ abuse wit the pen’s ink//~/
I’ll let everyone laugh at my pain while I continue to collapse as i reign//~/
but i know nobody could ever run a lap in my game let alone//~/
tap in my frame only to stop in awe to try an' get a grasp on my pain//~/
my existence is based on a tickin’ time bomb, one click, the nine’s on//~/
one hit, my mind’s gone, think before you know me, that’s one cliff to climb on//~/
my jaw hit the strip realizing my nightmare is just claws to my ribs//~/
it's all lies an' tips, my life's in ya hands, but you tossed mine an' you split//~/
happiness was somethin’ i chose to boast for most but it was false i admit//~/
feel the artist, so i held the blade an' i began to draw on my wrist//~/
stand in awe as it rips noticin’ my failure to move on is the cause of the slits//~/
hit raw an' it splits all i hear is silence as i pause at the lips//~/
i stall as it drips, not too familiar wit the laws of this bit//~/
but now i fall an' i sit, life's over, actions show you i'm callin’ it quits//~/

^^ FEELIN DAT LINE, & I GET DA MESSAGE BEHIND THIS VERSE...MOFUCKAS AINT GON' WANNA HEAR YA ISSUES OR SOME DEEP SHIT FROM YOU UNLESS YOU FAMOUS & IN THE INDUSTRY. CAUSE OBVIOUSLY NOBODY GON' FULLY RESPECT YOU LET ALONE EVEN TAKE YOU SERIOUS AS AN MC WHEN YOU DROPPIN YA LYRICS ON THE NET. IF YOU WAS TO DROP SOME BIG PUN OR JAY Z LYRICS IN HERE NOBODY HEARD BEFORE & SAY YOU WROTE IT SOME CATS WOULD STILL POST SOME NEGATIVE FEEDBACK HATIN ON IT, BUT IF YOU WERE TO SAY IT WAS PUN OR JAY, THE SAME MOFUCKAS WHO WOULD HAVE HATED ON IT WOULD HAVE COME WITT "DAMN PUN WAS THE GREATEST OF ALL TIME, R.I.P." OR SOME SHIT LIKE DAT FEEL ME.

that's word. goodlookin' fam, i appreciate it.

up-in-your-girl ^

Nice drop Skyll, Multies were nice, flow was nice, vocab was nice, concept wasnt original, but nice. Had enough heat to keep me readin'. Nice to see a few new heads droppin' good shit. This sites had some wack ass shit for awhile. Keep droppin'.

peace.

^^ thats so true

but about the verse

nice topic, nice flow, nice multis, nice rhythm scheme, overall ill verse

keep em coming dawwg

B eZ

that's word mentals and king. good lookin'

up-in-your-girl ^

up-in-your-girl ^