Grateful
 

beat by da cypher.

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/son...&songID=4333547

feed left on
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http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2823053

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quality needs to be upped..........ya beat comin in to loud.......ya flow's a lil off.......um but ya delivery is strate....could put a lil more energy in it......but yea work on those things man.....and keep droppen......

pz

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ive always liked da cypha beats
flows off alittle bit gotta hit them snares
delivery in parts is ok other parts sounds like yoru reading off the page
some parts are too quiet
same thing thoughout the whole track

mmm da cypha beats are too repetitive,but still good,quality is not really good, but still better than others, beats kicks in nice, flow is nice, pretty good, breath controle is knda bad, but its something you learn with time, emotions could be better, I like the adlibs behind, makes the song better, hook is pretty good, props on this track

6/10

*dont look*

thanks ya'll i honestly dont know where my flow is off, but i feel ya'll on the quality thing im spitting through an $8 desktop mic with some pantyhose in front of it. so i know the quality is off and sometimes i sound low, but if i put the vocals up any higher they get that annoying screech sound. thanks for the feed willa and speats. fucka black dragon.

ok i'm listening as I type

Whats Hot:The Beat

Whats Good:n/a

Whats Ok:your voice

Whats Off:Your flow is off a little bit
You gotta just let it all come out...dont hold anything back just rap it line for line like you read a book man........thats how easy it is..it'll come with time tho

Whats Wack:the quality

Overall this track is not very well put together you gotta up your emotion and pressense cuz I cant even sense your on the mic and dont even remember anything your sayin and its like a big blurr you know....it'll come with time..we were all at this level at one time..some people it comes too and some people it dont.....just keep on rapping and practicing....

5.5/10
-past tense

yo djb i'm not tryin to start beef, but i wuz bein honest i mean i didn't say that shit when u left feed on mine so grow up kid.....and accept constructive criticism........

pz

wtf i was just listenin to the beat coz i was gonna write to it and i see that youve made a song. Well Obviously great choice of a beat. Flow started pretty gopod, but then fell off horribly. Im feelin the multis, those were good, but they didnt flow. You kinda rap slow, and that beat sounded a bit fast for you maybe.