State Of Rap Pt.1
 

As Rugged Teens, Life Life And See What They've Seen
It's Switched, From Exotic Personalites To Snitches
Fake Emcees, Dope Beings Becoming An Endagered Species
Picture That, It's Whack Fucks Destructing Radical Raps
Workin' Respect, It's Dope Who Achieve, Not Anyone On Deck
Thinkin' Retirement, Rap's Lyrikal Culture Being Technically Spent
What's Dope? No One Knows Anymore, It's Droppin The Soap
Continually Raped, Seems Nobody Can Escape All Material Hate
Dickrode Outta Wins, Never Ceases, Constant Incessive Spins
Who Knows Who? That's How Battles Are Settled, No Skill Due
Rap's Turning Sour, We Never Know The Direction Of Every Hour
Lifestyle Created, Just Music Debated And Hurbs Cremated
It's Time For Change, We Can't Continue This Spiral of Derange
Everyone Running, Vet's Sonning, No One Is Truely Thinking
Slept On Pieces, It's Epidemic Is Worse Than Any Disease
Others Stealin Steeze, Who's Gunna Start To Believe?
Were Goin Downhill, Thoughts Not Spilled, No Pieces Grilled
No Positives Apparent, Our Strategies In-Coherent
We All Must Contribute, Follow Suit, Hit The Original Roots
Listen To The Forefathers, If Your Whack Don't Bother
Mission Statement, For All Who Don't Want Rap In A 6 Foot Basement

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...642#post1003642

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...646#post1003646

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=99846

This was good, not very many posts to have a say, but as far as lyrical content and vocabulary i was impressed. I write alot of poetry thats similar to the wordplay of this. Im feelin ya style

thought ya had a nice flow going...a bit different in places...thught ya scheme was ok....thought you could have done a better topic though.....but ya use of vacab added to it...so yeah nice drop....pZ

vocab and wordplay wise, this was dope as hell... flow was awesome and consistent... you could use some multis to spice it up though... and the topic was a bit played... but otherwise, it was dope

8/10

uppin..

Ayo this was kinda iight fa sho... better then some other peice's that i've peeped from you... it was coo fa sho... keep elevatin...

Caesar On3

good stuff. good perspective.

the one thing holding you back is the one line rap schemes. put in some multies and space it out a bit.