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im jus here 2 spit my flo
if u dont then u bout 2 kno
i got rhymes n my head thatll make ya scream
if u from my hood then u no wat i mean
i dont take shit no not at all
if u eva hit me ima make sure u fall
i got love 4 rappers that rap tha truth
im part of livin proof
if u spit at me wit sum whack ass ryhme
i wont even sit here and waste my time
if u wanna battle its all good 2 me
ill make u hurt/ thas how i be
im done 4 now aint it crazy how
i can make tha hardest niggas say god damn wow

holla at cha girl and tell me wat u think go or bad i love tha hatas

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This was ok...it could use some work though...structure was ok, try keeping your lines around the same length though so it helps the flow out in your pieces...also try adding some multies to this to help it out...but overall this was ok...and keep at it.

CrackaBox187, Axe E. UM, AcidRayne

yo that was aight but you need to work on your flow and ryhme scheme....keep at it though...