To Her
 

Kind-of like a christmas present to my girl . . . www.soundclick.com/jaecyph . . . first one on the page . . clearly reads "To Her" :) Enjoy . . YES I Know It Was Mushy, So What . .

*first beat*

Vocals are BEYOND too low in the beggining, they get better once the verse comes in, your ennunciation on this one is mad wierd

*second Beat*

that outta breathe, squeezing a shit out voice, kills me, other than that not bad.

overall heartfelt and thats always respected, your flow is good, its the voice and delivery taht kills me, i feel as if your "normal" rapping voice sounds mad gay and you are forcing this one out or something...

other than that, decent drop

.pz.

Thanks .

the beat is nice on the first one, nice emotion into it.. nice delivery... vocals are low though... on the second one, the vocals sound different then the first one... stiill good emotion into it.. but it was still dope... i liked it...

good job, vocals are low in the begining but get good once the song gets movin, overall good
peace

please critique me
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=99356

maaaaaaaan,

as alwayz ure shit is smash....this tracc was deep, i can tell u mean sumthn wit this song, the beats were niice as fucc, lyrics were nicely put 2gether and shit flowd perfect...nice

8.5/10

CIN
holla at tha kidd

first beat................

vocals low.......................lyrics nice..........like the atmosphere beat......



second versel..........

alot better...emotion and lyrics all there...........nice flow....


overall nice drop........

and yeah we got hook up and spit on a track

^funny ass nigga MANe

str8 track Jae

Deleted all The Bullshit and banned that one fag . ..

up :

ok...heres some feedback...after please vote on the following text battle...

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=101956

ok..i will be honest..(Havent started listening yet) if i do not feel it i shall say do not let this influence your vote in my battle..oNe..


hmmm..beat is a lil...different lol..nice..

quality..ok...intro a lil quiet

the flow is ill at the start...shit...

"None the less..None the less...
I kiss ya lips an have the taste of success"

ill metaphor...

hmm..occasionally.. ya voice sounds a lil forced but holding up with the first verse..

ok beat change..i was feelin first beat more than fabs...

ok...lol you took fabs style..nice..hahah

some nice multi's in the middle...

flow is varying..not going off but changing regularly between fab an ya own style...

nice touch..stops from gettin repetitive the time between beat changes is too long you need to shorten that an think of a clear cut way to end it but this wasnt the corny ass shit i was expecting it to be in all honesty...nice verse pretty deep an some nice lines...

special props on that 1 i quoted..illness.

thats kinda crazy with two beats in one song lol...but yeah, for the first one...im feelin it, hella real level...quality could be better, not really feelin your voice, voice overs are off, but flow is tight and lyrics are dope....second one...flow is a little jumpy lol...but its tight for a change, i like the lyrics...real shit...dope

^ u never heard 2 beats mix'd in 1 song... lol.. .

first verse, nice, some emotion seems outta place, but 4 the most it's good... kinda short... lyrics were good for the most, off topic for a few lines...

2nd verse...
a bit more clear... delivery i'm feelin more.. lyrics are more on topic thru this verse.. i like the flow on this 1 better too,, might jus' be the difference in beat styles tho....

nice track...
peep this
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=102013

awwwwwww,lol.......1st beat and verse sounded fine to me(dont know what everybodys talking about^^^^?) nice flow and voice...........second 1...............oh noooooooooooo.........not that beat............fabolous,lol.........sorry........ nice ass flow dog.......lyrics was deep.......I thought vocals sounded fine.....nice shit overall.....stay uppppppp

i have, just not two completely different beats...it goes from atmosphere instrumental...to fabolous instrumental lol...little bit of a change uplol