fuck this up
 

Now i will give you a flavor that will change your behavior/
you will be beggin down to your knees for a savior/
i should give you a sex disease when i come through while i fuck you/
And go do that to everyone then continue/
i dont wanna see your sorry ass face cause its a disgrace to everyone in any place/
you better not consider fightin back cause youll just suffer/
I will have you all mixed and fucked like a shuffler/
you remind me of a fake ass from the early 90's/
when some bitches made rap look like a joke and was dying/
you wanna take control of that and fuck everything up when it comes through to kill the industry/
You do that then every rappers ass will be history/
i should fuck you up faster than when michael jackson did while kobe was givin the white girl pussy action/
over a chair you were singin ill be there up and down like an elavator then get stuck/
thats when you just fucked all this up/
no reason for lies no reason for this shit ass things to take over/
Faster than ray rays 311 career compared to the other/
your like the source of course cause you cant rap/
you cant stunt or take control because you too weak to handle/
ill burn you up 2hot like a candle/
ill rape your moms and yo moms moms mom/
blow them up like bombs over baghdad/
its like alqaeda came to her and showed them some osama/
while yo mama was bein done i was there peain and havin some fun/
i terrorize you verbally physically and mentally while i fuck your memory/
grab your money steal and hide/
took yo ass through you in the fire and died/
hope you just had a great ride/

feed back please

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Yo that was strate son. Do how you do it and it's done how you did it. Bless the mic!

yey ^ there that was a nice freestyle touch up your structure and your gonna be a good freestyler on this site

thanks uppin fo mo

Hey man that was an aiight drop. It flowed so-so. If ya want ta get better though, ya have to add some multies. Just concentrate on one subject and let the pen go to work.

I give this piece a rating of 5/10, which is still a good rating. Also, add some vicious wordplay to this piece....

That was good. The flow was nice, you need a few more multis to give it a lil more flavor. But overall i was impressed with this. Stay focused and keep it real. 8-10

i liked it. thought the flow was dope and lyrics was aiight. keep it up

some nice lines..flow was spot on, only thing i'd develop is vocab..sometimes by making the way you word things more complex, you can bring a whole new light to your freestylin...and throw in some more multis...makes it gel...

pretty sweet, agree with the vocab thing, sometimes it was a bit predictable, try and liven it up.some surprises.still quite fresh.

Was pretty cool. I always like to read keystyle, it's better than readin a song. Comes out more interesting. This was. Especially the oart about Micheal Jackson. He he

i really like it. think it is very good