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Peeps talkin my lyrics & projectz are lackin vocab//Lyrically displayed wit a radically systemally undisplayable format//
My shit is guarateed 2 catch yo attention lik a dope ad//

I'll break u// & shake// How long u been rappin 4 u still ain't nice how long is it gonna take u// To reach my level// Might take u several//Years cause my spitz so hot u would swear that I'm a physically form of the devil//

U wanna harrass me//Your barz are unbearable & thrashy//Say tat I'm wack I get str8 in yo face lik acne//U can tell yo gurl been givin me brain cause her knees are type ashy//

Burn your house down wit matchez & gasoline//We all kno u a lonely azz nigga tat b in yo room wit vaseline//I'm a rookie unexperienced emcee wit barz of steel// Neva been as wack as yo azz so I don't kno how it feel//

Varied multiple tymez ya got da worst styles//U a funny azz nigga only tyme u were behind barz was da turnstylez//

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This was ok....your structure was ok, it could use some work though, try to shorten your lines down a bit though....also try adding some better multies and internals....flow was ok, could use some work though...but overall this was ok....keep at it.

nice offensive verbal spit. I like the first part, that shit made sense with the end of the first paragraph.