open mic from the new kid *13 year old flow*
 

yo yo they call me the iceman the only one who will leave you sliced and barely breathing, other rappers words is all ive been eaten on a path to victory leavin sum dead or severely beaten im nice no one is near even, one of the only real 1's cus all my shit is nuthin but real bein speaken

, or spoken, dont want to but have to leave sum of these cats dreams broken, swearin they hott wat have they been smokin,

especially cats like this str8 ace ill open his face and at his funeral body so mangled he needed a closed case

could get locked up for arson cus ill i do is spit fire leavin holes in yall cats like defective firestone tires, cus like memberships yall mufuckers are expired, and watchin all thses bad rappers left me inspired,

they showed how easy it is to obtain success, specially when they spittin wit no style, either that or my lyrical flow must be blessed,

but i dont go to church so im confused, when the bullets hit you its leavin more than a bruise im new and yall used,

you dont rap hard enuff cus after 3 months like a toothbrush your garbage, the type a cat who speaks hard on the mic gets smacked wit the burner and press charges,spittin hotter than 75% of yall artists

yea i kno you the type that build up your hype but when shit is real you lose to a dyke in a fight, so wat mutherfucker im white, but my flow make u go back in the lab and remix your shit like sprite, take your kicks and like nike im off in flight, icemans style is outta ya site

holla back

pm me for reviews ~1~

respected, lemme get this straight your 13? If so you got potential. I personally like to see a lil better wordplay with more vocabulary. I dunno, i like deeper writing. not bad though, keep it up

You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback to or this will get closed, Thanks.

hmmmm...well at 13, that is pretty good to be spittin and I like th use of multies in your verse, makes it flow really nice.

What I suggest tho, first is to seperate the different lines when posting plz. 2nd, It would really help if you like checked over ur lines, just proofread them and touch em up so they sound better, u hear what Im saying? like instead of a freestyle, make it sound more like a track.

Overall, decent verse, just work on the things I mentioned and i should b better.

not bad, better structure and u need it. 7/10

aight thanx for the advice yall should go vote on my first battle against str8 ace and check the cyphers cus i ripped him in there
peace

u need to vote on 3 open mic keystyles an' post the threads before u drop othawise a mod will delete ur shit heres a good one to hit up:

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=101048

..13??..If so..grat potential..I like your style..could work on your structure a little..good work kid...

Posted back without links...this is Closed...get links next time.