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The "Asesino"
[Asesino]
Once A Innocent Citizen Pillar Of The Community... He’d Aim To Help At Any Given Opportunity... He Sought Impunity To The Acts He Was To Commit... His Personality Split Sanity Destroyed Bit By Bit... Powerful Iniquity Vibes He Began To Transmit... A Being Transcending Into Insanity Illusion... A Life Of Delusion n’ Civilized Moral Confusion... Destiny Decided, Death Was Already A Foregone Conclusion... [Victim 1] He Grabbed Her, Dragged Into A Back Street... Even Wounded She Never Accepted Defeat... Head Cracked Against Stone Cold Concrete, Cut Wide... Even Though She Tried Her Hands Were Tied... N’ No-one Listened When She Helplessly Cried... The Rain Poured Outside, Knew This Was The End... She Tried To Pretend That Into Heaven She’d Ascend... But Why She Had To Die She’d Never Comprehend... Suddenly He Moved With Much Swift n’ Grace... Looked Right Into Her Face, Lips Abruptly Embrace... Death Kiss, Now She’d Be Hanged, Mutilated - N’ Her Life Disappear Without A Single Trace... [Victim 2] A Innocent Man Expert Computer Technician... Healthy Physical Condition n’ Full Of Ambition... He Struggled Violently But Soon Gave Into Submission... He Lay Silently As The ‘Devil’ Hit The Ignition... Took Him Into The Deep Woods No Moon Light... He Never Thought That He’d Die Horrendously Tonight... Cos He Was White Or Wrong Place Wrong Time? Never Been Guilty Never Committed A Crime... He Was Tortured Limbs Torn From His Body, A Single Shot... Ended Another Life That Everyone Had Just Forgot... [Police Officer] To Bodies Found To Them A Message Was Teasingly Bound... Otro Uno Muerde El Polvo, They Look Helplessly Around... “Another One Bites The Dust” Said With A Devilish Sound... Will There Be Another Victim, Another Slaying... Another Blameless Life Left Religiously Praying... Why Are The Paying Those Cost Of Being Alive... How Many Would Break Free And Survive...? Can We Not Contrive An Idea To Catch This Beast... Maybe The Motherfucker Is Already Rotten’ n’ Deceased... But Then We’ll Know At Least, That His Spirit Has Not Been Released... [Victim 3] This Time A Child Was Kidnapped So Indecently... However The Case Had Been Cooled Down Recently... No-one Was Expecting That The Toll’d Rise To 3.... N’ No-one Could Guarantee The Childs Immediate Safety... In Dismay Millions Watched Live America Today... As They Heard How A 7 Year Old Had Been Snatched Away... Crowds Shouting “Get The Fucker” But No-one Knew The Way... A Mind Of Decay Was Near It’s Pitiful End... But Not Before The Sick Bastard Could Strike Again... How Long Could He Obtain This Mental Mind Of Insane... N’ How long Could He Remain In This Building... Tryin’ To Resist His Urges That he Developed For Children... He Strung Her Up n’ made Her Swing, Looked Her In The Eye... Said “The End Is Nigh, You May As Well Say Your Last Goodbye”... Slash The Knife Hacked Into Her Fresh Young Skin... His Mind Had Just Released The Countless Demons Within’.... “VéaLo En infierno” He Laughed With A Grin.... The “asesino” ,as the police named him, was never found. Countless arrest’s were made over the next 5 years... the case remains unsolved. The “asesino” was believed to be of Spanish origin living in Ohio, 5 other murders were believed to be associated with him, however 3 of them have since been solved. The “asesino” is still out there, you never know .... he could be your neighbour. |
nice as fuck concept... good to see new formats.... seemed like you put alot of expression into this...painted the picture well....interesting read...i aint gonna bother going into multis n shit..thats all anyone says...well executed... really got the story across....nice...pZ...
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..Wow..a great piece..this was more of 'ART'...your wordplay..structure..storytelling...it was all there...
once again a great piece.. |
shit...forgot about leaving links..here:
Iceman187: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...346#post1014346 Deva: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=101045 Kmfrob: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=96407 |
I know it's xmas eve and not even a mouse should be stirring...but some replies wouldn't be far fetched...?
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Dope Ish..I liked it .....Interesting Piece...........................................Ke ep it up dawg....These Pieces wit tha Victims and Ish are interesting..I'ma Work on one Myself..
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...man this was nice, you have some pretty nice story tellin skills with your rhymes...I def liked the content as it was suspensful in story tellin mode...the rhymes were tight aswell...
lookin foward to seein some more drops like this... |
uppin'
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This Time A Child Was Kidnapped So Indecently...
However The Case Had Been Cooled Down Recently... No-one Was Expecting That The Toll’d Rise To 3.... N’ No-one Could Guarantee The Childs Immediate Safety... In Dismay Millions Watched Live America Today... As They Heard How A 7 Year Old Had Been Snatched Away... This was some real good wordplay, Nice to see you rhyming Rhythmic again...(I'm Bmack well used to be.) I changed computers and lost my info. Well hot spit |
uppin' again.....
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twin this was ill as fuck but where you been nuclear concept needs to push some moves pop your our leader and we need you to make moves this was agreat read lyrically you back to your consitancy of rhyme
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yo homie this drop was dope as fuck........ur vocab, wordplay, structure, rhyme...evrything was on fire homie......keep doin ur thang
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This was an ill concept-You are a great writer these days-You have elivated alot, To tell you the truth i couldnt be bothered saying anything else- You know its a good peice-Kepp writing
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thanx for the replies ppl....
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up it one last time....
see if i can't squezze one more reply... |
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