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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...297#post1018297
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...335#post1018335
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...344#post1018344

just sittin here smokin on tropical// which is leavin my flows philisophical//achievin all missions impossible//even the ones that just optional//if i see u on da block im goin to pop at u//if ur momma cries there nothin i can do//shouldn't of fucked with this nigga whos methodical//

i know its short. just tell me wat yall think.

It wasnt that good.....your structure needs work, dont put it like that, put it line on top of line and keep all your lines around the same length, so its structured good and so it helps the flow out...add multies to help it out, and try to make your drops a bit longer....keep at it.

aight, good lookin. just got one prob. i don't know wat a multie is

lol dawg.. what's this dawg.. wwwaayy to short this wasnt that good but work on ya multies hommie and shorten your lines they are too long

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Peace

i give this peice a 4.5 due to the length..

man Elevate Ur Structure need work i couldn't really read it and ya need to Get ya Flow Working In Paragraph Form It Truely Doesn't Work its Harder to read....Your Vocab need work but ya wordplay was nice man.ya really need More Multis......keep elevaten Man....Peace.....

Ummmmmm... It really had no point. Seemed like it was written in two seconds. Write a song and change my view.

I dont get it. thats all I got to say

that was way to short. id say at least 10 lines/5 bars per spit. fix ur structure so that the lines are on top of eachother and when writing try to make ur lines the same length like
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or something like that. i also wasnt realy following your rhyming scheme .