the brain of brian
 

the battles i fight throught my whole life
have remained pontless like a blunt knife

my foes unrelentlessly chase me, i drive my own mind crazy
i try coming back and asking the holy spirit to save me
shit just thinkin of every reocurring moment makes me lazy

i run the streetz of my mind helplessly
not knowin wats at the next turn i might just be a few steps away from insanity
trouble maker since elementary
always tired never resting like i was not meant~to~sleep
a whole decade of my lifes been nuthin but misery
adults wanting respect from me
askin if i need help? the truth is theyre the ones dat need therapy

im wonderin where all my freinds went
they all gone from others mal-intent
im actin like havin no one care bout u posseses no real threat
for those whove ive hurt i only feel remorse and regret
knowin that one day these enemies can help me pay the rent


btw, if ya dont know, my name is brian

upped

It was simple. Very rigid. Though seemed 'off hand', cos it stuck with a certain structure in such a way, it tainted the emotion a fair bit. Well, that's how i saw it anyway. Nonetheless, it had a certain amount of something to it. What? I dunno, personal emotion maybe?

...resp...

i know it was simple, this was one of my first poems. varentao, i respect wat u do. can u chek out sum of my other poems i think ull find them more enjoyable. thanx

^Nothing wrong with simplicity. It's good, some of best poetry is simple.

It just needs to be built upon now. For a first piece, it's good for sure. I didn't know it was your first.

Dang all that tude is not needed lol! J/k I aint read it but it sound stupid lol! J/k again it was alright considering my first poem was about a boy named Killers better half.....

umm, thanx? thats feedback. it is appreciated. u keep doin ya thing couse ure pretty good at this poetry stuff.

how you kno? have you read anything I've written?? I'ts horrible!

i like the way it all 'rhymes'. it very good. you crazy fan. That for sure. You crazy Fan.

this one was different from the rest... in a way shallower....... for a first poem this is thu shyt!!! i shudda wurd frum thu bak so i could read your poetry as you progressed poetically and lyrically!