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So many questions!
Life is complicated, like there is no escape
Everytime you think your happy, you hit another gate Fate, they say , in that case there is no point Sometimes I think to much , it makes me vomit Perhaps if our minds weren’t so limited, to understand Id ask so many questions, try to comprehend However some things we will never know, Why is it that I cant control my anger, why do I hate the snow? Is the Universe Endless, why don’t we control pollution? If there is really God , how does one explain revolution. Even further more, If there is god, why is there war. If Humans are made to reproduce, why isn’t every girl a whore I search for answers so much it hurts my head Than it hits me, There would be no question if I was dead |
a simple written piece, with many questions you ask and the closest thing you find to an answer is death. i found the rhyme scheme was a bit basic for this piece, it took away from the piece. the message was clear and strong thou and you made some pretty good points. i thought maybe there could have been more detail or depth to it. nice read thou
~Tera~ DONT HATE |
I like your name. Reminds me of igloos, polar bears and of course, Eskimo people...(how ignorant, eh?!..)..
The piece came together in a fitting way. It did go through a fair few things. In a rushed yet still effective way. It wasn't meant to be a fantastic insight into such issues. But merely to highlight them, but more how they effect people. Especially when in contemplation about them all. Which once again highlights the amount of problems in the world today...and ended in an echoing way. You know, rid problems by dying...which raises but more questions. ...resp... |
Thanks for the feedback
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I got an eerie feeling once reading the last line of this. Then, I read the piece again.. and I love how you started with the word life, and ended with death. To me, that was the 'start' and 'end' to the poem.
The rest was the middle.. which highlighted in a simple yet provocative manner some of the many questions we thinkers examine over and over in our minds everyday. Why oh Why.. But, V is right.. death being the answer to these questions, only serves to raise more questions, and so the cycle continues. Technically, written utilising a simple style, which I appreciated for the content of the piece, as I think a more elaborate one might have taken focus from the subject matter. Youve written the questions as we think them, without fancying them up.. I liked that. Nice write Eki. |
I thank you for the nice reply......
i gotta keep evolving as a writer....you guys are great support..... so long |
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