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My HardKnOck LiFe......
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WORD-PERFECT Skiddz Rhythmic Tendicies Took sum time on this...hope its a good read fo yall (speaking) Its a Hardknock life fo me.....a ghetto.....ima stoned kid........ (ME) Thats wut i am, strait up...all my life is a ghetto im like a WOODEN kid wit an adult named GEPETTO i dont know emotion cuz of my stoned heart i got a stoned brain so u know i aint that smart i dont show mercy to no1 cuz i dont know pain ive grown up a hard kid wit cold blood in his veins (FaMilY) my family...is torn apart,women get rapped,n men get deported luck fo me n my sistas my gaurdians got child abuse reported i dunno wut to do im the youngest in my gene pool my sistas tryin to make money by pleasurin horny fools thats a day 2 day profit fo dem while i go rob wut eva i can or sell that weed jus so my sistas can take a retirement plan (NoW) well that was 3 years ago so shit has calmed down now im a kid tryin to elevate to spit verbs,metaphors,n nouns my family is where eva so it really dont matta i chill wit my cousins livin by the gun n blood splatta so i got a hard knock life n i still got my life ahead been 15 years n im suprised i still aint buried n dead im grateful to god for keepin me safe n alive thank u for helpin me keep a cool strive n jive hope its a good piece.... uppin fo feedback Peace |
POP THIS HAD A GREAT CONCEPT BUT TROJECTION LACKED YOU WENT TO CIMPLE AND YOUR DETAIL IN RHYME LEFT MUCH FOR THE MIND TO WONDER....TALENT FLOW AND EFFORT WHERE THERE VISIOUSLY JUST NEEDS A RE READ AND SOME COMPLEXITY
BUT THIS ISNT HORRIBLE |
Yeah this was alright i thought....your structure was alright it could use some work here and there though i think...try adding some multies to it to make it better....Your flow was alright, it stayed on point through out it....but keep at it.
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damn thats some serious shit right there.
too bad you are lying and just got high with your friend and made a joke. that peice sucked! |
go flow, shame about the story.it would be nice to hear something different from time to time but still good and listenable.
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quite a simple played out piece..worked ok..like Masta said, flip in some multis and your halfway there..improve your emotion..this wasn't a drop that was meant to strike peoples hearts..but even so...it would have made it better.
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