It's Her N Me. .
 

She Ain't Jus My Everything. . She's My Life. . I've Had These Feelings. . Let Um Go. . Thought I'd Regret It. . But People Say Shit Eventually Works Out For The Better. . I'm Prayin' This Girl'll Be Mine As Long As Possible. . Listen . .

It Started As Conversations, She Peaked At Amazing
Such A Blazin Beauty, Had Me Cravin For More Looks See
Won't About The Pussy, It Was Bout Our Hearts Ma
Felt The Butterflies N Thoughts. . I Tried To Start Mine
I Pried My Parts To Find. . I Was Somebody Besides The Outside
Cause On The Outside I Was Contradicting My Inside
Cause On The Inside. . . I Was Dipicting A Portrait
Of Love, Ain't Try To Force It But Of Course It. .
Showed, I Glowed, You Know She Was Incredible
Something More Than Edible. . Told Her What I Felt. . Dreadful
Shit Blew Up In My Face Like A Broken Blender At High Speed
Thought It Might Be Over But Night Lead To Bright Things
So I Went Slower, No Cold Shoulder, Told Her Again
Fuckin' Shit Explodin Like Bombs Over Baghdad. . Thought I Lost A Friend
But I Ain't Toss This Gem. . I Polished It N Let It Shine
I Told Her One More Time That I Couldn't Let Go. . Felt That Tingle Up My Spine
Now Chris Cringle Ain't Listen This Time. . I Wanted Her Under The Mistletoe
Third Time Of Lettin My Whistle Blow. . Now It Seems I Ain't Missin Her No Mo'
'Cause

I Think Love This Girl, Plain To See Through My Daily Routines
So Beautiful Through All The Inbetweens, I'm Weak In The Knees
It's This Girl Who Makes Me Who I Am, It's With Her I Wanna Be
Ask Me Now Or Later, I'll Still Cater The Same Feelin'. . It's Her N Me

Shit Ain't A Blur To See. . I'm Seein' Clear N Real, Check It
People May Not Like Me But When I'm With Her, Respect It
Forreal, First Time I Made Eye Contact, Fact Is I Was Smitten
Good Riddance To The Other Kittens, It Was Written For Me To Be Gettin'
With This Girl, Beauty Illuminating Even The Darkest Place
And Even The Darkest Face Seen The Light From This Seemingly Sparkless Great
Her Laugh - Contagious, Her Smile - Outrageous
My Life Is Like A Book. . Damn This Girl Jus Keep Turnin' All My Pages
And You Shoulda Seen The Shocked Faces, "You Love Who?"
"You Can't, Specially After All The Shit You Done Been Through Too."
But Thas Who I Want As My Boo. . My Vision Is Finally Correct
I Don't Wanna Anotha Wreck I Wanna Protect This Love From A Vex
So Check My Words For Lies, Read Between The Lines, I'm True
I Think I Love This Girl. . Once Was Blind Now I Kno What To Do
I'ma Take Her Hand See, Fantasy To Reality Easily. . Guide Her
To Cupid For The Arrow, Wind-Song Of A Sparrow Sung With Me Beside Her
It's Her N Me. .

I Think I Love This Girl, Plain To See Through My Daily Routines
So Beautiful Through All The Inbetweens, I'm Weak In The Knees
It's This Girl Who Makes Me Who I Am, It's With Her I Wanna Be
Ask Me Now Or Later, I'll Still Cater The Same Feelin'. . It's Her N Me

REPLIED TO:

Liba Dee- In Cold Blood
Deva- Transition To Greed
Echo- America's In Deep Trouble

Not Even Carin' Bout The Flow. . It's The Meanin'. . This Girl I Wrote This Bout Is Real Special. . Jus Did A Lil Somethin For Her. . Bash, Hate. . I Could Give A Fuck. . I Realize This Ain't My Best. . Jus Want Some Opinions. . The Hook. . I Might Get One Of My Boys To Sing That Shit N Make A Track Outta It. Aiight. . Feedback Appreciated. . Pz.

i loved the feeling you put behind it, its always coo to let go and write. but it realy wasnt flowin for me and at times i felt it harsh to follow. a couple of good metas too i liked those.

you obviously put heart into this....maybe though, you concentrated all your focus on this, and in doing so have slacked on the rest....aint gonna mention structure..ya know my feelings on that....but the complexity..maybe it would have been executed better with a broader focus...but as it is..for what it is, a liked it.....emotion all through....pZ

lotta luv...............complexity is wow, but the flow were pretty lame, though the enjoyment dint faulter becoz of it...........nice stuff.

reply...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=102059 mine!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Up. . . Up. . And. . Up. . Dayum.

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Fuckin' Shit Explodin Like Bombs Over Baghdad . . . My Life Is Like A Book. . Damn This Girl Jus Keep Turnin' All My Pages
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I liked dat line
dis was a nice piece
keep droppin
8.5/10

I liked how you opened up and posted this. but I didnt catch the flow untill I got towords the end. keep it hommie

Was really good, it was kinda long, but it's okay, you saved yourself. Structure could use some work, but good work.