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Echo 12-29-03 10:09 AM

The Devil's Wish (Another Little Keystyle)
 
Relied to:

Bio*Chemist
Katz.Frost
Lyrical Jesus



Walking home from school when food was thrown at me
Four kids in a fuckn' car who don't even know me
A milkshake sprayed all over my fuckn' knew shoes
Cleaning it up, while they is paying their laughing dues
I put up my hoodie hiding from the bad bully hoodlums
Crying in my sweater, feeling like a piece a fuckn' scum (Awww)
Didn't know the finger back then, so I stuck up my thumb
put it in my mouth and sucked until I sucked myself dumb
I'm fucking afraid of the female chum I've fuckn' become
I am a female, but I feel like a fuckn' crumb (your not that small)
Tried to eat lunch one fuckn' afternoon in the lunchroom
but my bucktooth beaver friend was giving me doom
She threw a bowl a soup at me and I told her to resume
Wanna hide in a costume, like I'm in the fuckn' womb
Not protected like that, mother can't take care of me
It's the Devil's Wish for him to influence me as an emcee

Dev 12-29-03 10:28 AM

what you was trying to sya was ok...but iot came across in a pretty simplistic was....add more complexity to ya work....bring more to it....but as it is ok for the story the rest lacked....pz...keep at it

Dev 12-29-03 10:29 AM

bad spelling...but ya know what i mean...lol

~CeRtiFieD~ 12-29-03 10:31 AM

yeah complexity lacked, elevating is in order.........keep ya spit. An dawg if ya feel that way bout sh*t like dat, u need to tell sum1...............aigh Pa'EACE imout

please return the favour....
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=102059

Penskills 12-29-03 10:39 AM

..too simplistic..your flow and wordplay was below average..

Echo 12-29-03 10:41 AM

Ill keep workn' on it, and don't talk lyrics so serious. peace

~CeRtiFieD~ 12-29-03 11:12 AM

yeah dawg give feedback to my sh*t now........
aight.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=102059

young mike 12-29-03 03:52 PM

that was good i was feelin that


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