Callision verse Antonio Banderas
 

Rules - U spit first, 10 lines minimum

I no longer hit wit bullets just *ROCKETS*, and leave battles closed like neclace *LOCKETS/
rip ya arms out the *SOCKETS*, beat you senseless with'em till ya face is pushed in like *POCKETS/
no change of TOPIC, all ya text and audio is *NONSENSE*, it could never prosper over my treacherous *CONTENTS/
this battle will be won and closed like a *LOCK-IN*, I wouldn't say it was a KO but a TKO the way ya body got hit and lyrically *KNOCKED-IN/
yo rhymes are outta style and forgot like the word *JOSHIN!!!/
I keep *ON* runnin catz over and jumpin on *DOMES* like PRIEST *HOLMES/
Check mah *BARS* you're not able to defeat this rising *STAR*, I haven't even spit the minimum and beatin you by *FAR/
I got more chrome than a Big Tymer's #1 stunna *CARS/
I *BLAST* so *FAST* olympic judges couldn't clock how quickly I whipped dat *ASS/
Your fuckin *TRASH* i turn punks to *ASH* with a Rhyme *MASS*, of *1000 KILOGRAMS* to smoke you faster then lime green *GRASS/

Hmmm, I didnt think u were accepting the challenge. Give me like 20-40 minutes max cuz Im at work and dont wanna get fired............................................. .................................................. ...................................

Focus'd slained this herb, so I'll hit ur ribs to make u verbs fumble+
Callision? Ur words crumble, it now appears like ur verse is mumbled+
U've been lacking depth..pretend this is an audio..Listen..U suck ass in text+
Strapping ether to a top dogg surgeon is the only way ya impact a vet+
U could double ur efforts, but u'll just be cloning wak..Ur phony black+
Ur record 0 in 1,Okay..I'll take it easy cuz Wisconsin aint known for rap+
Ur writtens going audio is like listening to a moaning cat, U screech talk+
I have ya tasted graves in a dreams, Kill ya off while ya sleep walk+
Ya stupid..donated bmx bikes is the only way ya could FREEstyle+
Ya could guess star on Mardres Gras but still wouldn't be wild+

up for some votes............................................. .................................................. .................................................. ...................

OPENER: ANTONIO - Callision was jus reppin himself

FLOW: ANTONIO - it flowed alot smoother

PUNCHES: TIE - there wasnt that many good ones at all on either side, and Callision just seemed to try to make sense out of whatever word he could rhyme next

PERSONALS: ANTONIO, he talked bout how Callision lost before, and Callison just ripped random rhymes

MULTIES: ANTONIO by a bit, cause its harder to rhyme every last 2 words and make it still make sense, then jus put in a bunch of multies in one long ass line like Callison

VOCAB: ANTONIO- Collision just rhmes the same words we've seen a thousand tymes, ass, cars grass..etc. U can only do that if u do it cleverly enough and u didnt.

CLOSER:ANTONIO - Basicly it was more clever then Collisions, Alot more clever.

OVERALL VOTE: ANTONIO BANDERAS

Thanks for the vote..... Anyone else voting here???


Come one guys. I cant vote yet, but I can rate your writings.......................................... .................................................. ..................................

Votes?????

Votes.......PLEASE

Guess this is my last up...


What a waste of fucking time.............................................. .................................................. ................

ite antonio gets my vote cuase of all rnd better verse.his flow was better also structure.punches didnt hit hard but harder than the otha man.work on mre personals.......................put a vote on this dnt woz bout poll cus u cnt http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=102351 .........thx............pz

yeah Antonio's drop seemed to have more flow, structure and better vocab..the Callisions drop was weak..some played lines..

^sorry

vote...Antonio

i entered my reasons ^up there (previous post) it won't let me edit..or i would have.....

BREAKDOWN!!!!!!!!!!!!!

COLLISON

I no longer hit wit bullets just *ROCKETS*, and leave battles closed like neclace *LOCKETS/
rip ya arms out the *SOCKETS*, beat you senseless with'em till ya face is pushed in like *POCKETS/
OK OPENER LITTLE SIMPLE RHYME SCHEME

no change of TOPIC, all ya text and audio is *NONSENSE*, it could never prosper over my treacherous *CONTENTS/
this battle will be won and closed like a *LOCK-IN*, I wouldn't say it was a KO but a TKO the way ya body got hit and lyrically *KNOCKED-IN/
KINDA WEAK HERE AND MAN UR LINES ARE STREEEETCHED

yo rhymes are outta style and forgot like the word *JOSHIN!!!/
I keep *ON* runnin catz over and jumpin on *DOMES* like PRIEST *HOLMES/
BLAH

Check mah *BARS* you're not able to defeat this rising *STAR*, I haven't even spit the minimum and beatin you by *FAR/
I got more chrome than a Big Tymer's #1 stunna *CARS/
PLZ TELL ME U AINT JUST SAY DAT?

I *BLAST* so *FAST* olympic judges couldn't clock how quickly I whipped dat *ASS/
Your fuckin *TRASH* i turn punks to *ASH* with a Rhyme *MASS*, of *1000 KILOGRAMS* to smoke you faster then lime green *GRASS/
VERSE WAS WACK HORRIBLE...ELEVATE HOMIE FA REAL....GET IN THE MIRROR AND FREESTYLE BATTLE YOURSELF...THATS WHAT I DID...ATLEAST TRY DON'T STRETCH UR LINES AND TAKE ALL DEM FUNNY ASS SYMBOLS OUT UR VERSE
OVERALL=4/10

ANTONIO

Focus'd slained this herb, so I'll hit ur ribs to make u verbs fumble+
Callision? Ur words crumble, it now appears like ur verse is mumbled+
PRETTY NICE

U've been lacking depth..pretend this is an audio..Listen..U suck ass in text+
Strapping ether to a top dogg surgeon is the only way ya impact a vet+
VET=VETNARIAN=LINES ARE PLAYED


U could double ur efforts, but u'll just be cloning wak..Ur phony black+
Ur record 0 in 1,Okay..I'll take it easy cuz Wisconsin aint known for rap+
LOL

Ur writtens going audio is like listening to a moaning cat, U screech talk+
I have ya tasted graves in a dreams, Kill ya off while ya sleep walk+
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Ya stupid..donated bmx bikes is the only way ya could FREEstyle+
Ya could guess star on Mardres Gras but still wouldn't be wild+
[B]WHY WOULD HE WANNA BE WILD????? WEAK ASS VERSES FROM BOTH EMCEES BUT BANDERAS TOOK THIS BARELY BECAUSE HE HAD STRONGER PUNCHES NICER STRUCTURE AND A GOOD SCHEME


VOTE-AB

ab kicked ass he had a better structure punchlines and a ill opener!!

c u need 2 improve on structure and punchlines

vote- ab