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Dare
Here is a little short thing I wrote
Dare to push your way out of your mother`s womb; Dare to do your very best until the day they lay your tomb; Dare to live a full life in between; Dare to dream the impossible dream. Dare to learn how to walk undaunted by the fact that you might fall; Even if you fall learn from your mistake and dare to try some more; Dare to grow out of your mother`s craddling arms; Dare to bring your boisterous temper to a calm. Dare to find yourself a life long friend; Dare to love her until the very end; Dare to be loyal and faithful to her; Dare to ignore that fleshly stir; Dare to love her with all your heart; Treat her like a queen, respect her, be smart! Dare to leave your parent`s house; With a well chosen bride to be your spouse; Dare to start again that orbit around the earth; As you announce to this world your child`s birth. In case, my friends, you didn't see my plan; I am saying dare, dare to be a MAN! :guy: |
this had potential.. n' alot of it.
i could see if you improved you'd have alot better piece here,, just elevate you had a good concept n' hit this up http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=102145 |
Even though the dare to prove can get old quick, I think ya did a pretty good job here.....
5.2/10..... Nice flow on this peice dogg.... |
You posted a open mic already without links then you posted another one without links....this is closed, Get Links.
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