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down 2 ride
(talkin)remember that shit my nigga those were the days
verse1--- yeah i know we always said a gangsta wouldnt cry// well that shit was a striaght up lie// but when you came down we were down to ride// every time we came togeather we was ready to die// cause we were true// now that your gone im missen you// i know it sounds kinda of gay// we had love in a brotherly way// ya'll could never feel the pain i felt that day// remember that day when we fought rob and keaith// with out you the hood aint the same// ill kill a nigga if they disrespect your name// chourus(x2) we were always down to ride what happends when white and black coliped ill tell you tell got each others side now that your gone good bye |
you needa leave 3 links that you replied to.........or this gets closed........so do so.......
i liked the piece.......it was good.......but dont space your bars....... good topic......... good consistancy but make it longer.... :wtf: |
^ and you need to leave feedback
And Yes You Do Need To Leave 3 links or 3 Names Of People You Left Feedback To Or This Will Get Closed, Thanks. But this was ok....your structure needs work though....dont seperate the lines like that...also try keeping them the same length so it helps the flow out.....try adding some multies to your pieces to make them better as well...the emotion was there but just keep at it. |
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it was pretty good yo. keep droppin
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not bad i see a potential the seams exposed in soem and hidden in other lines you got a talent just buff it to be consitant.
other then that this was a pretty good read. |
Nice Work, I liked it, really short, and kinda simple, but stil good verse
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thank you all this is just the start i got more just need time to think but there will be a pt bout this girl
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dis was ok
kinda simple but nice and short keep elevatin and u'll get better 7.5/10 |
more thoughts please i wanna know what you all really think be real with this please
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yo, honestly wasnt feelin this, good heart in it, but vocab needs some elevatin, fo example, throw rhymes in other places than the end of a line
with out you the hood aint the same// ill kill a nigga if they disrespect your name// with out you the hood just aint the same i'll kill a nigga good fa disrespectin ya name or something to that effect ...the final blesses state.... 1' |
iight nigga thanks you kept it real
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more votes i wanna know wut u really thin hit this up please
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ya it was really touchin ya know
a lil short, i mean ive done sum short ones but damn, but all else aside dis was hot keep it comin |
thank you kid more thoughts please
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