Criticize22 vrs Yu Bin Sund
 

10 line max

u know rules

u drop first

good luck

coo foo

Im quick to kill find a place and bury men/
Thats why this dude dont want beef like a fucking vegetarian//
After this battle when i win dont be talking shit/
Goahead Claim you hard i already know you softer than pamela lee's tits//
You know im tay and like god i hold the power/
The only bars you drop is in the jail shower//
While you riding huv caps im ridin on "22" like im emmit/
ill beat the shit out of u only take me 5 miniutes//

that wuz iight i guess

A Quick K.O

Why Did U Even Shoot At This Vet..
Ur 13 Can't Rap And If You Lookin For GirlS Here Sorry U Ain't Hit Puberty Yet..
Ya Punches Are Like Elton John's Fights...They Never Land Straight..
This Kid Is A LightWeight......Who Knows Wat This Man Ate..
Like Gays In Car Accidents......Ima Wreck This Fag...
Doggie If You Think Your A Lone Star Your Mistaken.....Cause Its Only Ya Texas Flag..

im sorry but i couldnt tell if some of that stuff rhymed or not

oo now i catch the concept of it juts a weird setup to me sorry !

hey i give the win to pooch....she ate you critsize...
punches=pooch
metaphors=none
structure=none
originality=pooch
flow=critsize
vote=pooch

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-strobe

good thing u cant vote !

lol jk ya i think his was more original than mine but its all good !

uppin............................................. .................................................. .................................................. .................................................. .......numero 1

this was a good battle. i guess you have improved your skills crit. but if my vote would count it be for critisize, but only cause his stuff was original. but dont worry. you'll elevate soon enough

thanks phresh

oops. i didnt mean to say critisize in my paragraph for my vote, i mean yu bin sund. sorry for the inconvienance and expecially critisize. my bad. lol

phresh when u get 100 come back and vote 4 me if ya will thanks homie !