another set of random shit
 

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=102243

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=102228

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=102001

I knew this chevato from califonia
I think he's a fag and that he wants ya
I know he'd like to stick his dick in your ass
but look in his hand, he's got a whole lot of brass
cause' my name is scarface you see
I got a klok nine in my hand while you try to come at me and kill me
I'm sittin here and smoking weed thats making my eyes swell up like two pennies
I'm Clint Eastwood in his mid twenties
playing in movies like Dirty Harry
That's when I shot your man, I think his name was larry
People looking and trying to see
If they can find a decent person in me
It just can't be found
As hard as it may sound
I'm as ruthless as they come now
And many people just can't see how
a nice person like I was back then
can turn into a person that never can win
So now all I see is blood and lust
And a gangster and I have to do what I must
Thats why when I leave, my girls are in sorrow...Oh well
I just pick up the 7 digits from your momma for a dollar tomarrow

I'm just upping this thread so people might see it and give me some senseable feedback

Re: another set of random shit
 

extand your lines dude its fuckin up the flow when your lines are short as hell...word on your pucnhes...and get some bigger words iight peace

extand your lines dude its fuckin up the flow when your lines are short as hell...word on your pucnhes...and get some bigger words iight peace

yea def extend hte lines an addd..play on ur lines

Yeah this was ok i thought.....your structure needs some work though, like the people above me said try making your lines a little longer and keep them around the same length so its structured good and so it helps the flow out....but keep at it.

better rhymes man, too elementary, be more tough and talk harder shit. nteresting though.

thanks guys, I really appreciate this