Word Play eXtreme--Krytikal
 

You about to gamble your life away, But theres is a price to pay. freestyling till the end of day.When you read this you threw the dice I'm so sorry about your loss now you must pay the price or answer to the Crime Boss.
When I hold the mic, I turn poltergeist cold as ice, roll it twice. Soldier, you know it's right, show your fright when we get going hype, it's impossible to go My height, I control the tight and patrol the night, we behold the light below the hype, your nose is sliced, i'm iller than hoes and dikes, blow your sight more than whores on dicks//

...When I "drop" raps the "floor" gets split, adore your wrists, they're more than slit, I can go to war and shit, but before I hit, i'ma scorch a spit, like when the torch is lit, and you morph to it, lord should quit, You tore his shit, his sword to bits, and with that audio his cord was lit, refreshing more o' you kids than a morning shit, y'all gotta stop forging scripts, your boring lips need to shut//

...Bitch, agree to fuck, when you read this stuff, wi'll make you free and cut, when you see this rough, the greed is tough, so read the stuff, and i'll release your bluff, get on your knees abrupt, or i'll make you plead corrupt, to be like us, you need some luck, the fee is up, your gees can suck on these here nuts, i could heave your truck and leave you stuck, but i'd rather send you to the moon//

..Krytikal on the news, from dawn til noon, cuz i'm high on fumes from my old tunes, you'll be cryin soon, dying bruised, lie abused, try to refuse, i'll send you to the sky (heaven) accused of trying to be sly and amuse, i'll have you walk in bible shoes, and pay my rivals dues, you're deprived of clues, dry and used, my guys immune, I am too, you're fried in blues, cuz i can spit hot or cold//

...My lyrics are so dope, cops copped our CD's and i got arrested for pot i sold, go rot and mold, I'll stop patrols when i rock the shows, block your nose, even to porn-stars your "cock"'s opposed, you "chickens" are dropped and old, you ought to show how you got fought and told, you wouldn't get BUY (by) if you were bought and sold, you saught the gold and caught a cold, your spots will fold when we drop a bold, hot long pole, so futuristic it'll put spock on hold and cancel star-trek//

...I got more speed than a car-jack, bars racked, hotter than tar tracks, push ya far back from this hard rap, you'll gaurd straps, get jaw-slapped, mauled and cracked, your rhymes would be thin even if you saw fat (phat), claws racked for tryin to "bite" my "raw" raps, crawl back into a tall Sack, caus eshit I ain't got ya back..



Thats it, tell me what you think...
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rhyme scheme was off tha hook, so was tha wordplay especially in tha first verse.NIce spit keep it up!!! 8/10

I think this was a descent drop. This one bar was wak though:
When I hold the mic, I turn poltergeist cold as ice, roll it twice

Other than that, you did good.... Nice job...

THanx for the feed back, i'd start voting but I guess i'm not aloud to untill i have posted 100 times so yea. lol again thanx for feed back..

One Love

Yeah this was ok.....your structure could use some work though, try not to put it in paragraph form like that it makes it harder to read for some people and it throws the flow off, you should try to put it line on top of line so its structured good and so it helps the flow out...but keep at it.

Master C
 

Master C man where did you make your logo fomr that shits ill man hit me up at insideyourmind@neovampire.com or ost back here if you wanna let me know if you rather not tell then it's aight but it looks tight man

I AGREE PARAGRAPH FORMAT IS WACK....SOME BARS LACKED COMPLEXITY BUT OTHER THEN THAT YOU ON POINT WITH YOURS