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Detrimental 12-30-03 12:26 PM

Chrit vs. Detrimental (hotness)
 
You should have keyed it by now
and i see u on, so drop ur verse now
ur battle has close
we discussed the rules
lets do this

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I usually son kids, but ur a bitch so you'll have to be my loving-daughter...
87-7? Naw, its just like ya sig pic kid... Chrit's always cutting-corners..
You're a fake, just a school kid who hangs in the hallways-to-rhyme...
You fuckin geek, every time i come on I see your status is always-online!..
So it's really no big deal that you've got this little bita time devoted-to-me...
Too bad i'ma put your 'heart on a sample' and leave u 'emotionally-beat'..
Never been at-a-bar, you live with ya mom and don't even have-a-car...
So it's no suprise the only girl you'll ever get can be found in ya avatar..
Man everybody knows you're a school geek the way you 'wanna-test'...
And the way u constantly stay 'tight on D' i should call you Ron-Artest!..*
Calling out newbs for battles? Damn seriously this writer-is-demented...
You haven't 'matched up' since fuccin lighters-were-invented..
Chances are u'll get knocked out and wonder what every1s laughing-about...
Cos i've read ya verses, n i've seen heavier shit dropped from the ass-of-a-mouse!..

* - Ron Artest is a great defender in NBA.. D = Defense/Detrimental
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Good luck dawg...

Chrit 12-30-03 12:27 PM

<<still has 2 battles open

When one closes I'll key something up


prophacyz 12-30-03 01:59 PM

not a bad verse detrimental....................................... .................................................. .................................................. ........................................

Chrit 12-30-03 04:27 PM

Damn kid

Really dont need hyphens everywhere...
Anyhow... time to key

Shit winners always take the cake... of which I wrote the recipe...
Wont just knock this bitches lights out... I'll straight cut the electricity...
Damn ya net crew sucks... ever more than most kids...
Its not like ya'll fell into a slump... you were born with scoliosis...
Fuck this kids day up... Believe me I rip whores...
Man ya brains gotta be pea-size the way your ideas are piss poor
Peeped the soundclicks... Man those labtec mics are worthless....
And if this kids my reason for living, Prepare for Chrit to serve his purpose
We're going 14 a piece... your wack dude... I'll gas your team
You told me to match you, and I will... right after the gasoline
Fat fuck we all now you'd even rock the winners circle as a belt...
And I should be banned for cheating...
...After all Chrit is Detrimental.... to this faggots health
Already duckin Post and Swoop... from the dope ya'll aint responding...
So I figure I couldnt lose this match if I fucking rocket launched it

dw. 12-30-03 04:35 PM

quite a close battle but.....breakdown

flow-chrit...but close
punches-chrit
personals-detrimental...although not great
structure-tie
metas-chrit
enjoyment-chrit
best line-chrit
overall-chrit

really liked the knock ya lights out line.....tight!

vote-chrit

will ya vote on my battle wiv goofy in front lines....honest polled vote plz...thanx!

Vote disqualified. Please see this thread on what makes a valid vote.
-strobe

Chrit 12-30-03 04:44 PM

1-0

keep the votes coming



Crooked-Comical 12-30-03 04:47 PM

Flow & Structure = Tie
Punches = Chrit
Personals = Detrimental
Entertainment = Chrit
Open & Close = Tie

Vote = chrit


PEACE


Rapey favour please we really need some honest votes in these 2 battles

Vote disqualified. Please see this thread on what makes a valid vote.
-strobe

Chrit 12-30-03 04:54 PM

2-0


Born To Kill 12-30-03 05:01 PM

This is as closely as I've seen Chrit contested yet...

Well, lately.

Real nice stuff from Det, definately took the personals.

But Chrit fired back hard and nailed ya on the wordplay and punches.

The killers for me were the opener, the "pea/piss poor" and the "reason/purpose" lines...

Very, very tight.

Yeah, he took the closer too...
But that was pretty close, almost gave it to Det, but he stretched his shit and added some unneccesary filler.

Very tight battle.
Props to Det for laying something down so nice.
And props to Chrit for being able to battle back.

Peace

Holla back...

Tactical 12-30-03 05:17 PM

Chrit took both the opener and closer with some tight metas and wordplay. Detris shit was way too simple and he had some whack metas. Like the mouse shit? Chrit took metas and punches too. Personals I actually give to Detrimental cause some were a lil creative. But the Battle goes to Chrit for a batter harder hitting verse. 1

Straight Ace 12-30-03 05:22 PM

Detrimental
Good verse, you started of well..
Nailed some personals & had sum witty lines..
Overall i think your piece was nice, But..
Cud've been better with some re-wording.
Also like Born 2 Kill said, Your closer had a good..
Concept, but u lacked the right execution.
Overall Good.

Chrit
Nice.. your wordplay & punches basically shut it down..
Some ok quotables in there..
Basically both where equal but Chrit just edged..
The punches..creative..
Overall Good..

vote Chrit

Click here to vote & Return the favour...

Chrit 12-30-03 10:06 PM

Upping
3-0

I hate when kids bitch about votes when they get shut out anyhow...



U.Insight 12-30-03 10:22 PM

usually son kids, but ur a bitch so you'll have to be my loving-daughter...
87-7? Naw, its just like ya sig pic kid... Chrit's always cutting-corners..

not feeling this weak attempt at a personal

You're a fake, just a school kid who hangs in the hallways-to-rhyme...
You fuckin geek, every time i come on I see your status is always-online!..

decent nothing great

So it's really no big deal that you've got this little bita time devoted-to-me...
Too bad i'ma put your 'heart on a sample' and leave u 'emotionally-beat'..

this was ok

Never been at-a-bar, you live with ya mom and don't even have-a-car...
So it's no suprise the only girl you'll ever get can be found in ya avatar..

lol nice personal

Man everybody knows you're a school geek the way you 'wanna-test'...
And the way u constantly stay 'tight on D' i should call you Ron-Artest!..*

1st line you said already 2nd line could mean diffrent things but it was decent as a diss i guess

Calling out newbs for battles? Damn seriously this writer-is-demented...
You haven't 'matched up' since fuccin lighters-were-invented..

nice flip but kind of a played concept

Chances are u'll get knocked out and wonder what every1s laughing-about...
Cos i've read ya verses, n i've seen heavier shit dropped from the ass-of-a-mouse!..

this was decent nothing great

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Shit winners always take the cake... of which I wrote the recipe...
Wont just knock this bitches lights out... I'll straight cut the electricity...

decen flip on a played concept

Damn ya net crew sucks... ever more than most kids...
Its not like ya'll fell into a slump... you were born with scoliosis...

lol nice

Fuck this kids day up... Believe me I rip whores...
Man ya brains gotta be pea-size the way your ideas are piss poor

this was nice i've never seen this before, creative

Peeped the soundclicks... Man those labtec mics are worthless....
And if this kids my reason for living, Prepare for Chrit to serve his purpose


i've seen this befo kind of played but decent


We're going 14 a piece... your wack dude... I'll gas your team
You told me to match you, and I will... right after the gasoline


decent attempt at a flip but you and i know it's a played concept overall

Fat fuck we all now you'd even rock the winners circle as a belt...
And I should be banned for cheating...
...After all Chrit is Detrimental.... to this faggots health
Already duckin Post and Swoop... from the dope ya'll aint responding...
So I figure I couldnt lose this match if I fucking rocket launched it

bad finisher this was all border line filler to me nothing hard hitting


man you both had your wack or played lines and you both had your nice lines but i have to

vote chrit because he was more creative with his lines then det close close ass battle tho

~LyRiCaL-JeZuS~ 12-30-03 10:28 PM

Structure: tie
Flow: tie
Punches: chrit
opener: chrit
closer: chrit
metas: chrit
OVERALL VOTE: CHRIT
tight ass battle and chrit took it ( both were tight tho)

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Chrit 12-30-03 10:34 PM

4-0 yet again...
Cept dumbfuck will bitch about that last vote again....

Just give up det... you lost...



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