The Original Transformers
 

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CLIFFJUMPER
My perception blurs, my clouded eyes see decepticons stealing energon+
Orders are stay at bay, but my focus is relentless on killing Megatron+
Deez decepticons been stabbing me in my back since dawn of cybertron+
So I gonna discharge two shots to Megatron’s jaw as I draw my firearm+

Rumble
My weapons disengage the earth as I divorce the grounds layers+
I continue to impact my foes til their face resembles a round crater+
Summoned by Soundwave, I bounce the heads of dem autobots+
But somehow Star Scream seems to aways fuck up all my plots+


Bumblee
Since Cybertron, I've turned lights out on foes like I broke a switch+
I speak through my gun, so some say that I only spoke through clips+
Decepticons claim I don’t hold the weight because Im a buck_0_9+
I’ll leave them with ‘no foundation’, like I ‘deducted their spine’+

Grimlock
Cursed at birth, dam Optimus Prime to hell, I wanna be autobot leader+
I'm doomed to follow the command, my soul is incernerating like ether+
------....Aiight, U got the leader position for now Prime....--------------
My sword will rip Sound Wave’s neck ta give his vocals a breather+
While Constructicons keep drowning my mind, like im soaked in fever+

Optimus Prime
Grimlock, like studying maps U better keep quiet and know your place+
U autobot disgrace..My fist will elevate ur jaw..leave teeth displaced+
......................Back to da subject at hand....................
I a fearless leader, devoted speaker that rids the world of +
It seems I’m quoted eager, I’ve devoted to free the world of evil +

Megatron
Its like Im 'distributing fatality cards' the way I'm 'dealing out death'+
I’m serving Bumble bee his last meal as my bazooka enters his chest+
Shut up Star Scream! Another word and I’ll rip ur thorax outta socket+
Ya got a gun? Better Cock it!! Better yet its best ya launch out a rocket+

Star Scream
I always get bossed around like I’m the lowest member of the 4 horsemen+
If Megatron gets in my face again, I’m gonna dish out a shot to floor him+
Me and Thunder cracker rule the air waves like digital AC tweeters+
Nonbelievers..I’ll decease Megatron like Critical patient receivers+

Now Lets Get Serious No One Wants To Read A Long Ass Verse About Transformers

But I Guess You Stayed On Topic And Ya Flow Wuznt Too Bad
But You Get About A 7/10 Becuz I Didnt Really See Anything Special Or Any Vocab But Thats All I Gotta Say

Iight Piece I Guess, But It Didnt Have Much Vocabulary...Grab A Dictionary and Thesaurus Dogg...It Helps Elevate Your Rhymes Alot..Flow was Koo and it Stayed On Topic Well so I'll give you a

7.5

-Uno

This was alright i thought....structure in this was good.....the concept of this was good too i thought, didnt see anyone do a piece on transformers before...but i liked the read....i thought your vocab was fine...you had some good multies.....flow was good...keep at it.

uppin for any last minute feedback

i dunno. i think you had some interesting wordplay, but this was some boring shit. no one wants to read this crap. you want to leave open mic, write something people want to read about. i think you've got skill, but make your choice of topics much better. you'll get more readers.