just rhyming with Wonder
 

raps futures looking bright, and im the reason,
the price of my rookie card doubled this season,
my fame is growing, im starting to feel taller,
everybody knows my face, im the street baller,
people call me wonder, cos i keep people wondering,
i hit it no matter if its raining, snowing, thundering,
you say ur styles hot, i say my styles hotter,
i pull out so many tricks, they call me the globe trotter,
i got a mind of money and money on my mind,
u got the face, u got the chest but u got no behind,
people try to hate, people try to hot up,
i cud be on heroin but never get shot up!

yo dis was just me bored...rate it or hate it....lakers!

i can see what your styles about...when i started i was similar...ya need to up the complexity add some multis n internals it will help it along greatly.....jus keep working on it.....pZ...return the favour plz....

You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback to or this will get closed, Thanks.

yo 3 people who i put feedback on yeh

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...242#post1033242
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...245#post1033245
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...247#post1033247

yo man wots an internal??

wow thats good shit but short i fink

thanks...it was only short cos i was bored...didnt wanna hurt it too much!

yeah..nice concept..but i thing certain lines were kinda played out..just summat to keep ya busy? well, just add some complex vocab..and a few multis and metas..and your halfway there..i like your style..

The good - Nice attempt at wordplay and solid flow

The bad - Try to use a better choice of words....Use words that make people say dam..... Draw ur audience in....

5.2/10....Good job

yo safe all you people for tha advice yeh