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Dev 12-30-03 06:22 PM

'cut Short'
 
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...267#post1031267
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...277#post1031277
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...302#post1031302


Nuthin is ever certain, random is the iron curtain
That takes souls, when the best is yet to serve them
It don’t deserve them, I mean why does it happen to the best will’d
Like a bit, drilled,, through the core of the feeling
Im still breathing, but its got me stunned and left wheezing
I mean whoever! I got their feeling, its reality
And in some circumstances its defin-at-ely, gonna reap
The eternal sleep, it hits deep, an emotion a heavy notion
The heart beat slowens, tick, tick until it flat line zones
But ya gotta be prepared not scared, or your thraot’ll be snared
Filled up, with the eyes, and that’ll get them nowhere
Or you!,, hands like alcoholics shaking in despair
Gotta care, stay strong, it happens to 1 in 3, aint you!.. Lucky!
Don’t want it to be! Live ya life free, a day at a time
Until it declines or gets redefined as some thing following a different line
That cant be adjusted, straight ahead until it’s erupted
Don’t be presumptuous cos it jus hits like a car doing a 100!!……
…….pZ

Dev 12-30-03 07:06 PM

come on ppl...jus a quick sumthin i threw up... with meaning!...so.....pZ

Bio*Chemist 12-30-03 07:35 PM

"The heart beat slowens, tick, tick until it flat line zones
But ya gotta be prepared not scared, or your thraot’ll be snared"

Was feeling that line more then any other...

For a " Quick something" you put toghter...it was pretty good...
thoughts thrown onto paper or type up and an instant as your mind think of it..is the best way to do it....Nice piece...
oh yes your vocan is pretty much always on point..from what I have read from you so far...

Keep it up...

~LyRiCaL-JeZuS~ 12-30-03 07:46 PM

Ya I was feelin it pretty good, it was tight and some of the lines really stood out for me.......keep the shit up,

and plz vote on this shit i jus need 2 more votes

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=101455

Dev 12-31-03 06:34 AM

thnx ppl....any more...pZ

FanTa ZeE 12-31-03 06:50 AM

yeah..i liked it..flow was aiight and vocab was good too.....for something quick you really threw it together....


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